Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sau đó cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I'm not very good at memorising things. For instance, when I learn new vocabulary, I often forget the words after just a few hours, which makes it difficult for me to use them in conversation.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn và chú ý ngữ pháp. Hãy dùng liên từ để nối các ý và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về cách bạn ghi nhớ.

例: Yes, I often forget important things, especially when I'm busy or stressed. Therefore, I usually write down important tasks and set reminders on my phone, which helps me stay organized and reduces my anxiety.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên kết các ý một cách logic, đồng thời cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to be careful with my words because sometimes I speak without thinking, which can hurt my friends. Therefore, I always try to be more thoughtful to maintain good relationships.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên từ để nối các ý. Hãy mô tả chi tiết hơn về cách bạn sử dụng danh sách và điện thoại để ghi nhớ.

例: I tend to forget things quickly, so I always make a to-do list for the day and take notes on my phone. Since I carry my phone everywhere, I can easily check it whenever I forget something.

× It's made me feel uncomfortable and less convenient when I try to, at least in my conversation.

✓ It has made me feel uncomfortable and less comfortable when I try, at least in my conversation.

The phrase 'It's made' is a contraction of 'It has made', which is correct, but 'less convenient' is not appropriate to describe feelings; 'less comfortable' fits better. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; removing 'to' after 'try' improves clarity.

× I often forget their words after just a few hours.

✓ I often forget the words after just a few hours.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrectly used to refer to 'words'. 'The words' is the correct phrase to refer to vocabulary items previously mentioned.

× I usually write down important talk and reminded on my phone, which help me stay organized and feel less worried.

✓ I usually write down important talks and reminders on my phone, which help me stay organized and feel less worried.

'Important talk' should be pluralized to 'important talks' or replaced with 'important things to talk about'. 'Reminded' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'reminders'. Also, 'help' agrees with plural subject 'talks and reminders'.

× To avoid this, I usually write down important talk and reminded on my phone, which help me stay organized and feel less worried.

✓ To avoid this, I usually write down important talks and reminders on my phone, which help me stay organized and feel less worried.

The preposition 'on' is correctly used with 'my phone' here, but the sentence has other errors as noted above.

× In my daily life, I think it's important to remember. To stay direct, because sometimes I tend to speak without thinking we can cause missing to. Friends being carefully what I say helps me maintain good relationship.

✓ In my daily life, I think it's important to remember to be direct because sometimes I tend to speak without thinking, which can cause misunderstandings. Being careful about what I say helps me maintain good relationships.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'To stay direct' should be 'to be direct'. 'We can cause missing to' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'which can cause misunderstandings'. 'Friends being carefully' is incorrect; it should be 'Being careful'. 'Good relationship' should be plural 'good relationships'.

× Because I forget fast and so I'm always my to do things on one day on my list.

✓ Because I forget things quickly, I always put my to-do things for one day on my list.

The phrase 'I'm always my to do things' is incorrect. It should be 'I always put my to-do things'. Also, 'forget fast' should be 'forget things quickly' for clarity.

× Note on my phone too.

✓ I also take notes on my phone.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'I also take notes' makes it a complete sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× When I carry phone to every spot I go.

✓ I carry my phone everywhere I go.

The original sentence is awkward and incomplete. 'Carry phone to every spot I go' is incorrect; it should be 'carry my phone everywhere I go'.

× When I forgot something I will open my phone and check.

✓ When I forget something, I will open my phone and check.

The verb tense should be present tense 'forget' to match the future tense 'will open'. Also, a comma is needed after the introductory clause.