Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better naturalness. For example, instead of repeating 'memorize' and 'a lot', you can use synonyms or rephrase. Also, try to keep your answer within 4-5 sentences for conciseness.

例: Yes, I'm quite good at memorising because I regularly study many articles and summaries. It has become a habit to retain large amounts of information daily, which helps me improve my memory skills.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about what you forget and why. Also, avoid short fragmented sentences.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important details during exams, probably because I panic under time pressure. Besides that, I sometimes struggle to remember people's birthdays, which can be embarrassing.

提案: Your answer contains some unclear and awkward expressions, and some sentences are incomplete or confusing. Try to organize your ideas logically and use proper sentence structures. Also, avoid irrelevant or unclear details that may confuse the listener.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember many things, such as where I put my groceries and when to buy them. Since I live alone, I have to manage everything myself, including taking care of my dog and keeping track of his health.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more coherent and natural. Avoid repeating 'so' at the beginning of sentences and try to explain your method clearly with linking words. Also, avoid asking the examiner a question at the end in this part of the test.

例: I usually use my phone to remember important things by keeping notes of tasks and actions. This method is convenient because I can easily check my reminders whenever needed.

× Yes, I'm really good at memorizing things because I have to study a lot of articles and get it on my mind every day.

✓ Yes, I'm really good at memorizing things because I have to study a lot of articles and get them on my mind every day.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect here because it refers to a singular noun, but 'a lot of articles' is plural. The correct pronoun should be 'them' to match the plural noun. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12).

× Yes, mostly I have forgotten every important details on my exams, maybe because it's I panic a lot due to the time duration.

✓ Yes, mostly I have forgotten every important detail on my exams, maybe because I panic a lot due to the time duration.

The phrase 'every important details' is incorrect because 'every' is used with singular nouns. The correct form is 'every important detail'. Also, 'it's I panic' is incorrect; it should be 'I panic'. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1) and sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Yes, mostly I have forgotten every important details on my exams, maybe because it's I panic a lot due to the time duration.

✓ Yes, mostly I have forgotten every important detail on my exams, maybe because I panic a lot due to the time duration.

The phrase 'it's I panic' is grammatically incorrect. The correct structure is 'I panic'. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Or even I can't remember people's birthday very often after.

✓ Or even I can't remember people's birthdays very often afterwards.

The word 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' because it refers to multiple people. Also, 'after' should be 'afterwards' to indicate time. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and incorrect use of adverbs (ID 20).

× In my daily lives I need to remember a lot of things like where have I kept my groceries to?

✓ In my daily life I need to remember a lot of things like where I have kept my groceries.

The phrase 'daily lives' should be singular 'daily life' because it refers to the speaker's life. Also, the question form 'where have I kept my groceries to?' is incorrect; it should be a statement 'where I have kept my groceries'. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1) and sentence structure error (ID 26).

× In my daily lives I need to remember a lot of things like where have I kept my groceries to?

✓ In my daily life I need to remember a lot of things like where I have kept my groceries.

The preposition 'to' at the end of the question is unnecessary and incorrect. The correct sentence does not require 'to'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11).

× Since I'm living alone I need to manage everything on my own hands so I have to basically remember everything in my life, even have a friend, my dog or not eventually poop.

✓ Since I'm living alone I need to manage everything on my own, so I basically have to remember everything in my life, even whether my friend, my dog, has pooped or not eventually.

The phrase 'on my own hands' is incorrect; it should be 'on my own'. Also, the sentence structure is confusing and needs clarification. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Since I'm living alone I need to manage everything on my own hands so I have to basically remember everything in my life, even have a friend, my dog or not eventually poop.

✓ Since I'm living alone I need to manage everything on my own, so I basically have to remember everything in my life, even whether my friend, my dog, has pooped or not eventually.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs restructuring for clarity and grammatical correctness. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Has he pooped in three days? What color?

✓ Has he pooped in three days? What color is it?

The question 'What color?' is incomplete and needs a subject and verb to be grammatically correct. Adding 'is it' completes the question. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and sentence structure error (ID 26).

× So as I said, I use my phone a lot, so I keep track of the things I need to do or the things I have recently taken action on.

✓ So as I said, I use my phone a lot, so I keep track of the things I need to do or the things I have recently acted on.

The phrase 'have recently taken action on' is wordy and awkward. Using 'have recently acted on' is more concise and correct. This relates to verb in the past participle form (ID 9).

× So further when I can see that it's just a one move away.

✓ So later, when I can see that it's just one move away.

The phrase 'So further when I can see that it's just a one move away' is awkward and ungrammatical. 'Further' should be 'later', and 'a one move' should be 'one move'. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26).