Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. For example, say "Yes, I am good at memorizing things because I have a strong memory and often remember important details."

例: Yes, I am good at memorizing things because I have a strong memory and often remember important details.

提案: Your answer lacks coherence and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and provide specific examples with linking words. For example, "Yes, I have forgotten important things like my keys and mobile phone. This is quite common and happens to many people in my country."

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things like my keys and mobile phone. This is quite common and happens to many people in my country.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to be concise and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I need to remember many things daily, especially my mobile phone, because it is essential for my work and communication."

例: I need to remember many things daily, especially my mobile phone, because it is essential for my work and communication.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words and correct grammar. For example, "I am an organized person, so I usually remember important things by following a regular timetable and making notes in my pocket diary to avoid forgetting them."

例: I am an organized person, so I usually remember important things by following a regular timetable and making notes in my pocket diary to avoid forgetting them.

× Yes, I always memorize things because I'm good in memory and I have I had a experience of memorize all things.

✓ Yes, I always memorize things because I have a good memory and I have had experience memorizing all things.

The phrase 'good in memory' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'have a good memory'. Also, 'I have I had a experience' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'I have had experience'. Additionally, 'experience of memorize' should be 'experience memorizing' to use the gerund form after 'experience'.

× As in my life, I always forgot many things.

✓ In my life, I always forget many things.

The use of 'forgot' (past tense) is incorrect here because the sentence refers to a habitual action, which requires the present tense 'forget'. Also, 'As in my life' is awkward; 'In my life' is more appropriate.

× Some of them are keys, mobile phones.

✓ Some of them are keys and mobile phones.

The sentence lacks a conjunction to properly connect the list items. Adding 'and' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× These things are forgettable by everyone and it is the most common thing in my country.

✓ These things are forgettable by everyone and they are the most common things in my country.

The pronoun 'it' does not agree with the plural subject 'these things'. It should be 'they' to match the plural subject. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' to agree with 'these things'.

× Well, I need to remember so many things like mobile phones.

✓ Well, I need to remember many things like mobile phones.

The phrase 'so many things' is acceptable but 'many things' is more formal and appropriate here. No major error, but 'so many' can be considered informal.

× Mobile phone because it is very essential part of my life and my all the work are incomplete without mobile phones.

✓ Mobile phone because it is a very essential part of my life and all my work is incomplete without mobile phones.

The phrase 'very essential part' needs the article 'a'. 'My all the work' is incorrect; it should be 'all my work'. 'Work' is uncountable and singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'.

× Well, I am a managed person.

✓ Well, I am a well-organized person.

The phrase 'a managed person' is incorrect and unnatural. The intended meaning is likely 'well-organized person' or 'a person who manages well'.

× I mostly remember thing with my periodical timetable and I make the notes in my pocket diary so I didn't forget the things.

✓ I mostly remember things with my periodic timetable and I make notes in my pocket diary so I don't forget things.

'Remember thing' should be 'remember things' (plural). 'Periodical timetable' should be 'periodic timetable'. 'Make the notes' should be 'make notes' without 'the'. 'Didn't forget' is past tense, but the context requires present tense 'don't forget'.