Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is honest but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'I'm not good at memorizing things' and try to provide a clear topic sentence followed by a brief explanation.

例: Honestly, I find it difficult to memorize things, so I often forget my plans for the day.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains unnecessary repetition and questions that do not answer the examiner's question. Try to respond directly with a clear example and avoid rhetorical questions.

例: Yes, I once forgot an important meeting because I didn't write it down in my calendar.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific. Also, avoid incomplete sentences.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my routine and plans, such as what tasks I should complete, what meals I will have, and the messages I need to send to friends.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more fluent and structured. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating similar phrases.

例: To remember important things, I usually take notes on my phone, and if something is very important, I write it down in a notebook for extra security.

× I will usually forget what I plan to do.

✓ I usually forget what I plan to do.

The use of 'will' for habitual actions is incorrect here. In English, the simple present tense is used to describe habitual actions or general truths. Therefore, 'I usually forget' is correct instead of 'I will usually forget'.

× Yes, I have, but as you know I I'm not good at memorizing things.

✓ Yes, I have, but as you know, I'm not good at memorizing things.

There is a typographical error with 'I I'm'. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence. Also, a comma after 'as you know' improves clarity.

× Why even forget?

✓ Why do I even forget?

The sentence lacks a subject and auxiliary verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'do I' forms a proper question structure in English.

× Why have forgotten something important?

✓ Why have I forgotten something important?

The sentence is missing the subject 'I'. In English questions with 'have' as an auxiliary verb, the subject must follow it.

× I think I need to remember what was my routine and my plan today, what I should do for example, and what I plan to eat, what I plan to, who I plan to chat with and what message should I send.

✓ I think I need to remember what my routine and my plan are today, what I should do, for example, what I plan to eat, who I plan to chat with, and what message I should send.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing verbs in embedded questions. In indirect questions, the subject comes before the verb, e.g., 'what my routine and my plan are' instead of 'what was my routine and my plan'. Also, 'what message should I send' should be 'what message I should send' in indirect speech.

× I will take note of important things and sometimes I will just tap on my screen and when the things are more important to me I will write down and take a note.

✓ I take note of important things, and sometimes I just tap on my screen. When things are more important to me, I write them down and take a note.

Using 'will' for habitual actions is incorrect; simple present tense should be used. Also, 'the things' is unnecessary; 'things' suffices. The sentence is long and can be split for clarity.