Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains contradictory statements ("I am very good" but "I have a short memory"). Try to be clear and concise, directly answering the question with relevant details. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, I can easily remember people's names and their phone numbers, which helps me stay connected with friends and family.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat confusing. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, once I forgot my wallet at the grocery store. I was in a hurry after paying the bill, and I accidentally left it on the counter. Fortunately, I realized it quickly and went back to retrieve it.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains filler words like "uh". Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about what you remember and how you do it, and avoid redundancy.

例: In my daily life, I mainly need to remember special events, so I set reminders for them. Besides that, I can easily recall my work schedule because I write everything down in my diary. Reading my notes helps me remember all my tasks effectively.

提案: Your answer repeats information and has grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve flow. Avoid repeating phrases and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

例: To remember important things, I usually set reminders on my mobile phone. The notifications alert me a day before the event, which helps me prepare in advance and not forget anything important.

× I can easily remember the mobile number names of the person as well as the face of the person.

✓ I can easily remember the mobile number and name of the person as well as the face of the person.

The phrase 'mobile number names' is incorrect because 'number' and 'name' are singular and should be listed separately. Using 'number names' incorrectly combines two singular nouns into a plural form. Correcting to 'mobile number and name' clarifies the meaning and maintains proper singular/plural usage.

× Is one time I forget my wallet on the shopping store and it was happened when I eagerly bought my grocery from the store and I paid my bill and by mistakenly I forgot my wallet on the top counter.

✓ One time I forgot my wallet at the shopping store; it happened when I eagerly bought my groceries from the store, paid my bill, and mistakenly left my wallet on the top counter.

The sentence contains multiple past tense errors: 'Is one time' should be 'One time'; 'forget' should be 'forgot' to match past tense; 'was happened' is incorrect, should be 'happened'; 'grocery' should be plural 'groceries'; 'by mistakenly I forgot' is awkward and incorrect, better as 'mistakenly left'. These corrections align the sentence with proper past tense usage and improve clarity.

× Is one time I forget my wallet on the shopping store and it was happened when I eagerly bought my grocery from the store and I paid my bill and by mistakenly I forgot my wallet on the top counter.

✓ One time I forgot my wallet at the shopping store; it happened when I eagerly bought my groceries from the store, paid my bill, and mistakenly left my wallet on the top counter.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'shopping store' and 'top counter'. The correct preposition for locations like stores is 'at'. For 'top counter', 'on' is correct, but the sentence structure was awkward. Adjusting prepositions improves the sentence's naturalness and correctness.

× I eagerly bought my grocery from the store

✓ I eagerly bought my groceries from the store

The word 'grocery' is a non-count noun when referring to food items collectively, but here it should be plural 'groceries' to indicate multiple items. Using the plural form correctly quantifies the items purchased.

× Our daily lives set a reminder for the special events only and, but on the other things, I can easily remember my schedule of work and uh, and it's a good way to remember all the things I, uh, note down on my diary and when I read it, I can easily remember the all.

✓ In our daily lives, I set reminders only for special events, but for other things, I can easily remember my work schedule. It's a good way to remember everything because I note it down in my diary, and when I read it, I can easily remember all.

The original sentence misuses 'Our daily lives set a reminder' which incorrectly assigns an action to 'daily lives' instead of the person. Changing to 'I set reminders' corrects the pronoun use. Also, 'note down on my diary' should be 'note it down in my diary' to use correct prepositions with pronouns.

× I note down on my diary and when I read it, I can easily remember the all.

✓ I note it down in my diary, and when I read it, I can easily remember all.

The phrase 'note down on my diary' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' for diaries or notebooks. Also, 'the all' is incorrect; 'all' alone suffices. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× I already mentioned for the important event and for the important things I always set a reminder on my mobile phone and when the the notification of the reminders remind me one day before the event so I can easily remember all things.

✓ I already mentioned that for important events and things, I always set a reminder on my mobile phone. When the notification reminds me one day before the event, I can easily remember everything.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and articles: 'mentioned for' should be 'mentioned that'; 'the the notification of the reminders remind me' is redundant and awkward; 'all things' is better as 'everything'. These corrections clarify meaning and improve pronoun and article usage.