Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy và cụ thể hơn về những việc bạn hay quên.

例: I'm not very good at memorizing things. For example, I often forget simple tasks like making a cake, having lunch, or going to bed on time.

提案: Bạn nên chia câu dài thành các câu ngắn hơn để dễ hiểu và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về cảm xúc hoặc hậu quả của việc quên đó.

例: Yes, I once forgot to pick up my younger sister from school at 7 PM. As a result, my grandfather had to go instead. It made me feel really guilty because it was an important responsibility.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn về những việc bạn cần nhớ hàng ngày.

例: In my daily life, people often have to remind me about things. However, when I have a loan to repay, I usually make a list on paper or my phone. Sometimes, if the task is urgent, I keep thinking about it to make sure I don't forget.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về cách bạn sử dụng danh sách hoặc kỹ thuật ghi nhớ.

例: To remember important things, I usually make lists either on paper or on my phone. If the task is urgent, I keep reminding myself by thinking about it repeatedly throughout the day.

× I'm not good at memorizing things and my mother often told that I am very often forget the things that my mother told to me.

✓ I'm not good at memorizing things and my mother often told me that I very often forget the things that my mother told me.

The sentence lacks the object 'me' after 'told', which is necessary to complete the verb's meaning. Also, 'am very often forget' is incorrect; it should be 'very often forget' without 'am' because 'forget' is a verb, not an adjective. The correction fixes these issues by adding 'me' and removing 'am'.

× Example, I forget to make a cake or have lunch or sleep on time.

✓ For example, I forget to make a cake, have lunch, or sleep on time.

The phrase 'Example' should be 'For example' to introduce an example properly. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list for clarity.

× Yes, I have forgotten things very important that I forget to pick my young sister up after her school that is 7:00 PM in the evening and I forget to pick her up and my grandfather have to go and pick her up instead of me.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten very important things, like forgetting to pick my young sister up after her school at 7:00 PM in the evening, so my grandfather had to go and pick her up instead of me.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'Have to' should be 'had to' to match past tense. Also, 'things very important' should be 'very important things'. The correction improves clarity and tense consistency.

× ...and my grandfather have to go and pick her up instead of me.

✓ ...and my grandfather had to go and pick her up instead of me.

The subject 'my grandfather' is singular, so the verb should be 'had' instead of 'have' to agree in number and tense.

× In my daily life my people around me have to remind me a lot, but if I have a loan I usually use a list in paper, on paper or on phone or sometimes I will remind and keep thinking about it if it in a short period.

✓ In my daily life, the people around me have to remind me a lot, but if I have a loan, I usually use a list on paper, on my phone, or sometimes I remind myself and keep thinking about it if it is in a short period.

The phrase 'a list in paper' is incorrect; it should be 'a list on paper'. Also, 'on phone' should be 'on my phone'. The sentence also needed commas for clarity and 'I will remind' should be 'I remind myself' for correctness.

× ...or sometimes I will remind and keep thinking about it if it in a short period.

✓ ...or sometimes I remind myself and keep thinking about it if it is in a short period.

The verb 'remind' requires a reflexive pronoun when the subject and object are the same, so 'remind myself' is correct. Also, 'if it in' is missing the verb 'is'.

× If I have to remember important things, I often use lists on paper or on phone.

✓ If I have to remember important things, I often use lists on paper or on my phone.

The phrase 'on phone' is missing the possessive pronoun 'my' to specify whose phone it is.

× Or sometimes if this task in short period or in short time, I keep thinking of it all the time to remind me about that task.

✓ Or sometimes, if this task is in a short period or a short time, I keep thinking of it all the time to remind myself about that task.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'task'. Also, 'remind me' should be 'remind myself' because the subject and object are the same person.