Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and redundancy in your answer. Also, make your sentences clearer and more natural by using correct grammar and word order. For example, instead of saying "I I often sometimes I forget", say "I sometimes forget". Keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, I am good at memorising dates and times, but I sometimes forget people's faces.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid filler words or repeated phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, try to provide more specific details about your feelings and actions to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, two months ago I forgot my child's doctor's appointment. I felt very terrible and ashamed, so I called the clinic to reschedule it.

提案: Avoid using filler words like "uh" and "you know". Make your answer more structured by starting with a clear topic sentence and then adding specific details. Also, clarify unclear terms like "FA" to make your answer more understandable.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember appointments for my children and myself, such as doctor visits. Additionally, I have to take care of my kids when they go to school.

提案: Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "also" or "in addition" to connect your ideas smoothly. Be specific about the tools you use and how they help you remember important things.

例: I use my smartphone to set reminders for important tasks. In addition, I use apps like Google Calendar and To-Do List. Sometimes, I also use voice assistants to help me remember things.

× Yes, I have a good memory on dates and time.

✓ Yes, I have a good memory for dates and time.

The correct preposition to use with 'memory' when referring to what is remembered is 'for', not 'on'. So, 'memory for dates and time' is correct.

× However, I I often sometimes I forget about someone's face.

✓ However, I often sometimes forget someone's face.

The sentence has redundant pronouns and misplaced adverbs. 'I I' is a repetition error, and 'often sometimes' is awkward; it is better to use either 'often' or 'sometimes'. Also, 'forget about someone's face' should be 'forget someone's face' as 'forget' does not require 'about' here.

× Yeah, two months ago I forgot that my one of my kid kids appointment with the doctor.

✓ Yeah, two months ago I forgot one of my kids' appointments with the doctor.

The phrase 'my one of my kid kids appointment' is incorrect. It should be 'one of my kids' appointments' to correctly show possession and plural form.

× So at that time I felt very terrible and shy shamed.

✓ So at that time I felt very terrible and ashamed.

The word 'shy shamed' is incorrect. The correct adjective is 'ashamed' to express feeling embarrassed or guilty.

× So then I called them back and rescheduled the appointment. After that I I, I.

✓ So then I called them back and rescheduled the appointment. After that, I...

The sentence ends abruptly with repeated 'I I, I' which is incomplete and unclear. It should be completed or omitted for clarity.

× I need to remember my appointments with my kids and with my FA, with my doctors.

✓ I need to remember my appointments with my kids, with my FA, and with my doctors.

The sentence lacks proper conjunctions and commas to separate items in a list. Adding commas and 'and' improves clarity.

× Sometimes I used voice assistance to remain nothing.

✓ Sometimes I use voice assistance to remember things.

The verb tense 'used' should be present 'use' to match the context. Also, 'remain nothing' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'remember things'.