Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct tense and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: I am not very good at memorising things because I often forget to bring important items, like my camera, when I go out with friends.

提案: Your answer has grammar mistakes and unclear phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structure. Also, try to give a direct answer first, then explain with examples.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before, so I usually write them down on my phone or in a notebook to help me remember.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and informal. Start with a clear topic sentence and provide specific details. Avoid vague phrases like 'kind of stuff'.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember tasks like preparing breakfast for my parents and completing my homework on time.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct sentence structure. Be more specific about your method.

例: To remember important things, I write notes on paper and stick them on my computer monitor so I can see them frequently and not forget.

× Like when I hang out with my friends I always forgot to bring my camera some stuff.

✓ Like when I hang out with my friends, I always forget to bring my camera and some stuff.

The sentence mixes present tense 'hang out' with past tense 'forgot'. Since the action is habitual, present tense 'forget' should be used to maintain consistency.

× Actually know if there is something important, I will note it down on my mobile phone or I will write it down on my notes in order to memorizing the important thing for me.

✓ Actually, if I know there is something important, I will note it down on my mobile phone or write it down in my notes in order to memorize the important thing.

The phrase 'Actually know' is missing 'if I' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'memorizing' should be 'memorize' because after 'in order to' the base form of the verb is used.

× Actually know if there is something important, I will note it down on my mobile phone or I will write it down on my notes in order to memorizing the important thing for me.

✓ Actually, if I know there is something important, I will note it down on my mobile phone or write it down in my notes in order to memorize the important thing.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'my notes'; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to writing in notes or a notebook.

× I will write it down on the paper and stick it on in front of the computer's monitor in order to remember the important things I never get off.

✓ I will write it down on paper and stick it in front of the computer monitor in order to remember the important things and never forget them.

The phrase 'stick it on in front of' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'stick it in front of'. Also, 'computer's monitor' should be 'computer monitor' without possessive. 'Paper' does not need 'the' here. The phrase 'I never get off' is incorrect; it should be 'never forget them' to convey the intended meaning.

× Such as I have to remember to prepare my breakfast for my parents kind of stuff.

✓ For example, I have to remember to prepare breakfast for my parents and other similar things.

The sentence starts with 'Such as' which is incorrect for starting a sentence; 'For example' is appropriate. Also, 'my breakfast for my parents' is confusing; it should be 'breakfast for my parents'. The phrase 'kind of stuff' is informal and vague; 'and other similar things' is clearer.