Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words for coherence.

例: I'm not very good at memorizing things naturally, so I rely on technology to help me. For example, I set reminders on my phone, and my husband also helps me remember special occasions like anniversaries.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many grammatical mistakes, making it hard to understand. Focus on structuring your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use past tense correctly and avoid repetition. Linking words like 'then' or 'after that' can improve coherence.

例: Yes, I once forgot my dentist appointment. I only remembered it after the hospital called me to remind me, and I felt bad for missing it.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better flow.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember appointments and important events. Therefore, I use my phone's calendar to set reminders, and I also ask my husband to remind me of special occasions.

提案: Your answer is a bit disorganized and contains grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid listing without explanation and improve sentence clarity.

例: I usually remember important things like birthdays and anniversaries naturally. For other events, such as appointments or exams, I rely on email reminders and also keep notes about my diet.

× I'm not a good memorized person because I need to take time to remember the things I forget easily.

✓ I'm not a good memorizer because I need to take time to remember things as I forget easily.

The word 'memorized' is a past participle and incorrectly used as an adjective here. The correct noun form is 'memorizer' to describe a person who memorizes. Also, 'the things I forget easily' is better phrased as 'things as I forget easily' for clarity.

× So that's why I take a help from technology, set a reminder on my phone and also my husband helps me to remember the things.

✓ So that's why I take help from technology, set reminders on my phone, and also my husband helps me remember things.

The phrase 'take a help from' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'take help from' without the article 'a'. Also, 'set a reminder' can be pluralized to 'set reminders' if multiple reminders are implied. 'Helps me to remember' is better as 'helps me remember' for natural usage.

× He's a good memory.

✓ He has a good memory.

'Memory' is a noun, so 'good memory' needs a possessive verb 'has' to indicate possession. Saying 'He's a good memory' is incorrect because 'memory' cannot describe a person.

× He always remind me the special occasion, a special event.

✓ He always reminds me of special occasions and special events.

The verb 'remind' requires the preposition 'of' when indicating what is being reminded. Also, 'remind' should be in third person singular form 'reminds' to agree with 'He'. Plural forms 'occasions' and 'events' are more natural here.

× One time I forgot my appointment with the dentist and that time I take 2 long time to remember the things until the when I received a call from the hospital and reception it realized me that I missed my apartment and after that I take too long time to get.

✓ One time I forgot my appointment with the dentist and it took me a long time to remember until I received a call from the hospital reception informing me that I missed my appointment, and after that, it took me a long time to get there.

The verbs 'take' should be in past tense 'took' to match the past event. 'Reception it realized me' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'hospital reception informing me'. 'Apartment' is a wrong word here; it should be 'appointment'. The sentence is long and needs punctuation for clarity.

× I applied to be honestly I take a help of technology especially my mobile phones.

✓ To be honest, I take help from technology, especially my mobile phone.

The phrase 'I applied to be honestly' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'To be honest'. 'Take a help of' should be 'take help from'. 'Mobile phones' should be singular 'mobile phone' if referring to one device.

× I set reminders on the calendar and mentioned my specialty appointment and I also tell to my husband and he easily remind me all the special key zones and events.

✓ I set reminders on the calendar and note my special appointments, and I also tell my husband, who easily reminds me of all the special occasions and events.

'Mentioned' is past tense and inconsistent; 'note' or 'mark' is better in present tense. 'Tell to my husband' should be 'tell my husband' without 'to'. 'Remind me all' requires 'reminds me of all'. 'Special key zones' is unclear; 'special occasions' is more appropriate.

× Just I remember only my birthday, my husband and mine if other special occasions, on an anniversary, on others special events like any appointment I booked, any exam that time by e-mail reminders remind me for that Special things also note down my diet.

✓ I only remember my birthday, my husband's and mine, and other special occasions like anniversaries and special events. For appointments or exams, email reminders remind me of those special things, and I also note down my diet.

The original sentence is fragmented and confusing. It needs to be split into clearer sentences. 'My husband and mine if other special occasions' is unclear; corrected to 'my husband's and mine, and other special occasions'. 'Remind me for that Special things' should be 'remind me of those special things'. Capitalization of 'Special' is unnecessary.