Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You need to make your answer more natural and clear. Avoid redundancy like "memorize things easily" twice. Also, try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, you can say: "Yes, I am good at memorising things, especially when I read something carefully. This helps me remember information more easily."

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things, especially when I read something carefully. This helps me remember information more easily.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to answer directly with a topic sentence, then explain with specific details using linking words. For example, say: "Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, in school, I memorised a page that contained answers for my exam, but unfortunately, I forgot it during the test."

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, in school, I memorised a page that contained answers for my exam, but unfortunately, I forgot it during the test.

提案: Your answer is confusing and does not directly address the question. You should clearly state what you need to remember daily and explain why. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example: "In my daily life, I need to remember my tasks and appointments. To help with this, I make sure to rest and refresh my mind, which improves my memory."

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my tasks and appointments. To help with this, I make sure to rest and refresh my mind, which improves my memory.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many fillers. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. For example: "I remember important things by associating them with my daughter. When I think about her, it helps me recall what I need to do."

例: I remember important things by associating them with my daughter. When I think about her, it helps me recall what I need to do.

× I'm at memorizing things, especially when they give me something to read or whenever I am reading.

✓ I'm good at memorizing things, especially when they give me something to read or whenever I am reading.

The phrase 'I'm at memorizing' is incorrect because the verb 'be' should be followed by 'good at' plus the '-ing' form of the verb. The correct expression is 'I'm good at memorizing'. This is a common collocation in English.

× I will just it will be easy for me to memorize things easily.

✓ It will be easy for me to memorize things.

The original sentence is redundant and awkwardly structured. 'I will just it will be easy' is incorrect and confusing. Simplifying to 'It will be easy for me to memorize things' makes the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I have experience about that before so that things happen.

✓ Yes, I have experience with that before, so those things happen.

The preposition 'about' is incorrect after 'experience'. The correct preposition is 'with'. Also, 'that things' should be 'those things' to refer to plural items previously mentioned.

× When I was in school, I memorize a page, so one of the pages are the answer that will come out in my exam, so I easily forgot it.

✓ When I was in school, I memorized a page, so one of the pages was the answer that would come out in my exam, but I easily forgot it.

There are multiple issues: 'memorize' should be past tense 'memorized' (Past tense issue), 'one of the pages are' should be 'one of the pages was' (singular subject with singular verb), and 'will come out' should be 'would come out' to match past context. Also, 'so' is better replaced with 'but' to show contrast.

× When I was in school, I memorize a page, so one of the pages are the answer that will come out in my exam, so I easily forgot it.

✓ When I was in school, I memorized a page, so one of the pages was the answer that would come out in my exam, but I easily forgot it.

The verb 'memorize' should be in past tense 'memorized' to match the past time frame. Also, 'will come out' should be 'would come out' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I I only need to take your refreshments or relax so that way it will be helpful for me to quickly remember the things I I want to do in the in the day life.

✓ I only need to take some refreshments or relax so that it will be helpful for me to quickly remember the things I want to do in daily life.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrect here because the speaker is talking about themselves, so 'some' is more appropriate. Also, 'day life' should be 'daily life'. Repetition of 'I' and 'in the' is removed for clarity.

× I only need to take your refreshments or relax so that way it will be helpful for me to quickly remember the things I I want to do in the in the day life.

✓ I only need to take some refreshments or relax so that it will be helpful for me to quickly remember the things I want to do in daily life.

The phrase 'in the in the day life' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'in daily life'. Also, 'so that way' is redundant; 'so that' suffices.

× And yes, umm, I always remember things, especially most of the important things, uh, when I look up to my, uh, daughter.

✓ And yes, umm, I always remember things, especially most of the important things, uh, when I look up to my, uh, daughter.

No correction needed for pronouns here; the sentence is acceptable as is.

× So I will quickly be able to, uh, understand and remember whatever I have taken there.

✓ So I will quickly be able to understand and remember whatever I have learned there.

The phrase 'have taken there' is awkward and unclear. The verb 'taken' is not appropriate here; 'learned' fits better to express acquiring knowledge or information. Also, removing unnecessary pauses improves clarity.