Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to structure your answer more clearly by starting with a direct response, then adding specific examples. Avoid repeating phrases and improve grammar, for example, use 'I often forget where I put my phone or change.' Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: I'm not very good at memorising things. For instance, I often forget where I put my phone or my keys. This makes me spend a lot of time searching for them. Additionally, I sometimes struggle to remember important numbers. Therefore, I usually write things down to help me remember.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question directly. Use correct grammar such as 'I have forgotten' instead of 'I have forgot'. Be specific and coherent, and use linking words like 'for example' properly. Also, clarify the example to make it logical and natural.

例: Yes, I have forgotten something important before. For example, once I forgot to bring my homework to school, which made me feel embarrassed. Because of that experience, I always check my bag carefully before leaving home.

提案: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence. Use correct grammar and clarify your ideas. For example, explain what you mean by 'when my home is' or rephrase it. Keep your answer natural and avoid vague statements.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember important appointments and where I live. Sometimes, I find it hard to recall my home address, so I keep it saved on my phone. However, I don't try to remember every little detail that happens each day.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to give a clear and logical response by explaining your methods to remember important things. Use linking words and correct grammar. Avoid confusing phrases and be specific.

例: I usually remember important things by writing them down on paper or saving them on my phone. This helps me avoid forgetting tasks or appointments. Also, there is a Chinese saying that 'a penny saved is a penny earned,' which reminds me to be careful and attentive.

× No, it's memorizing.

✓ No, it's memorising.

The student used the American English spelling 'memorizing' instead of the British English 'memorising'. Since the question uses 'memorising', the correction aligns with the original spelling style.

× I often forgot where do I put my, where do I put my phone, where do I put a change?

✓ I often forget where I put my phone, where I put my change.

The student incorrectly used the past tense 'forgot' for a habitual action, which should be in the present tense 'forget'. Also, the question form 'where do I put' is incorrect in this statement; it should be a statement 'where I put'.

× And I need a lot of time to remember my number.

✓ And I need a lot of time to remember numbers.

The phrase 'my number' is vague; if referring to phone numbers or multiple numbers, plural 'numbers' is more appropriate. Also, 'a lot of time' is correct but could be more natural with 'much time' or 'a lot of time' depending on context.

× Yeah, maybe I have forgot something important before.

✓ Yeah, maybe I have forgotten something important before.

The past participle of 'forget' is 'forgotten', not 'forgot'. Since the sentence uses present perfect tense 'have', the past participle form is required.

× once I forgot to bring my cat to ho to school, which made me embarrassed.

✓ Once I forgot to bring my cat to school, which made me embarrassed.

The phrase 'to ho to school' is incorrect and likely a typo. It should be 'to school'. The sentence structure is corrected by removing the extra 'ho to'.

× So I think it's very important to check your bags probably.

✓ So I think it's very important to check your bags properly.

The adverb 'probably' is incorrectly used here; the correct adverb is 'properly' to mean 'in the right way'.

× Is likely to be I need to remember when my home is.

✓ It is likely that I need to remember where my home is.

The sentence lacks a subject and uses 'when' incorrectly. 'It is likely that' introduces the clause properly, and 'where' is the correct question word for location.

× I don't really need to remember everything that happened in my life.

✓ I don't really need to remember everything that has happened in my life.

The tense should be present perfect 'has happened' to indicate life experiences up to now.

× Usually by bikes, he's right.

✓ Usually by writing things down, he's right.

The phrase 'by bikes' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. The intended meaning is probably 'by writing things down' or similar.

× He's done through paper or through my phone.

✓ I do it through paper or through my phone.

The sentence is unclear and uses 'he's done' incorrectly. The student likely means 'I do it' referring to remembering important things by writing on paper or using the phone.

× Uh, I found certain things to write it down, take me on the light.

✓ Uh, I find certain things to write down, which helps me remember.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. The correction clarifies the meaning that writing things down helps memory.

× My third entry prevent me from forgetting it's, it's a Chinese thing that goes a penny is marked in the mind and it's probably that.

✓ My third method prevents me from forgetting. It's a Chinese saying that 'a penny is marked in the mind', and it's probably that.

The sentence has multiple errors: subject-verb agreement ('prevent' should be 'prevents'), unclear phrasing ('entry' should be 'method'), and run-on sentence. The correction separates ideas and clarifies meaning.