Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Use a clear topic sentence and explain your method of memorising with linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. I usually create mental images of what I want to remember, which helps me recall information more easily.

提案: Your answer is confusing and incomplete. Avoid redundancy and use correct grammar. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words.

例: To be honest, I have never forgotten anything important because I pay close attention to such matters. For example, I always write important tasks down to ensure I remember them.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Use a clear topic sentence and connect your ideas with linking words. Be specific about what you remember daily.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember appointments and tasks. Therefore, I regularly check my planner and use my phone's reminder app to stay organised.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and grammatically incorrect. Avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Provide specific methods you use to remember important things.

例: I remember important things by reviewing my planner and using my phone's reminder app. Additionally, I create mental images to help me recall important information more effectively.

× Actually, yes, I am, because I'm coding something in my mind, something that I want to remember them.

✓ Actually, yes, I am, because I'm coding something in my mind, something that I want to remember.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrectly used here because it refers to 'something' which is singular. The correct pronoun should be omitted or replaced with 'it' to match the singular noun. Using 'them' causes a pronoun agreement error.

× And so I try to take a photo of them in my mind and I remember them, so there's I memory.

✓ And so I try to take a photo of it in my mind and I remember it, so there's my memory.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrectly used to refer to a singular concept 'a photo' or 'something'. It should be 'it' to agree with the singular noun. Also, 'there's I memory' is incorrect; it should be 'there's my memory' to use the correct possessive pronoun.

× If I won't tell the truth, I've never forgotten something important because I'm very sensitive on something important and try to be my best to remember them somehow.

✓ If I tell the truth, I've never forgotten something important because I'm very sensitive about something important and try my best to remember it somehow.

The phrase 'If I won't tell the truth' is incorrect; the correct form is 'If I tell the truth' because modal verbs like 'will' are not used in conditional clauses starting with 'if'. Also, 'sensitive on' should be 'sensitive about'. The pronoun 'them' should be 'it' to agree with singular 'something important'.

× I record them and record it and I.

✓ I record it and record it, and I...

The pronouns 'them' and 'it' are inconsistently used. Since the object is singular 'something important', 'it' should be used consistently. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for pronoun usage.

× Actually there isn't any special things for remembering.

✓ Actually, there aren't any special things for remembering.

The phrase 'there isn't any special things' mixes singular verb 'isn't' with plural noun 'things'. The correct verb is 'aren't' to agree with the plural noun 'things'.

× Just review my planner or use my phone's reminder app can help me to remember things daily things.

✓ Just reviewing my planner or using my phone's reminder app can help me remember daily things.

The original sentence lacks proper subject-verb structure. Gerunds 'reviewing' and 'using' should be used as subjects. Also, 'help me to remember' is better as 'help me remember'. The phrase 'things daily things' is redundant; 'daily things' suffices.

× As I said before, I remember some important things by reviewing my planner and using my phones app and I try to use of that image which I took took it in my mind about important things and.

✓ As I said before, I remember some important things by reviewing my planner and using my phone's app, and I try to use that image which I took in my mind about important things.

The pronoun 'that image which I took took it' is incorrect and redundant; 'took' is repeated and 'it' is unnecessary. Also, 'phones app' should be 'phone's app' to show possession. The sentence was incomplete and corrected for clarity and pronoun use.