Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并补充具体例子。

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things, especially when I was younger. For example, I could easily remember poems and important dates during my school years.

提案: 回答内容较简单，表达不够流畅，缺少连接词。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并详细说明忘记的原因。

例: Yes, I have forgotten important tasks before. For instance, when my manager assigned me a task, I forgot it because I was overwhelmed with many other responsibilities at the time.

提案: 回答内容重复且句子断裂，建议合并句子，使用连接词，并具体说明记忆内容的重要性。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember English vocabulary and grammar rules because I work as an English assistant and teach students regularly.

提案: 回答含有过多填充词，表达不完整。建议减少犹豫词，完整表达记忆方法，并举例说明。

例: I usually try to remember important things mentally, but nowadays I also use tools like my smartphone's calendar and reminder apps to help me.

× Actually it depends on my ages.

✓ Actually it depends on my age.

这里的“ages”是复数形式，但表达年龄时通常用单数“age”。

× When I was a kid, when I was in middle school, senior school, my I am good at I was I was good at memorizing things such as I came memories.

✓ When I was a kid, in middle school and senior school, I was good at memorizing things such as memories I came across.

原句结构混乱，重复且不完整，需调整句子结构使其通顺且表达清晰。

× Yes I did. I find when I was working my leader told me some important task but I forgot it because so many tests flooded me.

✓ Yes, I did. I found that when I was working, my leader told me some important tasks but I forgot them because so many tasks flooded me.

“find”应使用过去式“found”，且“task”应为复数“tasks”，代词也需对应复数。

× I find when I was working my leader told me some important task but I forgot it because so many tests flooded me.

✓ I found that when I was working, my leader told me some important tasks but I forgot them because so many tasks flooded me.

“task”应为复数“tasks”，且“tests”应为“tasks”，语义更符合。

× Because I was working in English institution.

✓ Because I worked in an English institution.

表达过去的动作时，使用一般过去时“worked”更合适。

× Because I was working in English institution.

✓ Because I was working in an English institution.

“institution”前需要不定冠词“an”，因为是首次提及。

× I need to teach some students.

✓ I needed to teach some students.

根据上下文，描述过去的工作经历，应使用过去时“needed”。

× I was good at memorizing things such as I came memories.

✓ I was good at memorizing things such as memories I came across.

“I came memories”结构错误，应使用短语“memories I came across”表示“我遇到的记忆”。

× Umm, uh, at first I can remember this uh, by my brain, but now I need to uh, use some tools or methods such as my telephone, smartphones, memory or.

✓ At first, I could remember things by my brain, but now I need to use some tools or methods such as my telephone, smartphone, or memory aids.

句子结构不完整且混乱，需调整时态和补全表达，使句子完整通顺。