Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors such as 'memorize' instead of 'memorise'. The explanation about numbers and Chinese is confusing and lacks coherence. Try to give a clear, concise response directly addressing the question, followed by a specific example with logical linking. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For instance, when learning Chinese, I often memorise characters and their meanings, which helps me understand the language better. This practice improves my comprehension and retention.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but there are minor errors such as 'preoccupated' instead of 'preoccupied'. To improve, use linking words like 'because' or 'as' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to vary your vocabulary and sentence structures to sound more natural and fluent.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before, especially when I am stressed. For example, I once forgot to bring my certificates to a job interview because I was preoccupied with other worries. I believe strong emotions can affect concentration and memory.

提案: Your answer starts well but becomes unclear and disorganised towards the end, with phrases like 'which health we stay' and 'remember this thing' that do not make sense. To improve, keep your sentences clear and coherent, use appropriate linking words, and avoid vague expressions. Focus on specific examples and organise your ideas logically.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember important tasks and appointments, such as meetings with colleagues and project deadlines. Additionally, I plan my meals in advance and organise my schedule to manage my time effectively and reduce stress.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some unclear phrases like 'Apple Looks app' and 'read the information along allow three or four times'. To improve, clarify the names of apps or tools you use, and use correct expressions such as 'read the information aloud three or four times'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I usually remember important things by recording them in the Apple Notes app or writing them down on paper. I also find it helpful to read the information aloud three or four times, which helps reinforce my memory. This method works well because I can review the information whenever I need to.

× Yes, of course I'm good at memorize things.

✓ Yes, of course I'm good at memorising things.

The phrase 'good at' should be followed by a verb in the '-ing' form (gerund). 'Memorize' should be changed to 'memorising' to be grammatically correct.

× because you can see comprehension in Chinese.

✓ because you can see comprehension of Chinese.

The correct preposition to use with 'comprehension' is 'of' rather than 'in' when referring to understanding a language.

× Numbers have different meanings and for me it's very easy to understand what the meaning in the Chinese company is.

✓ Numbers have different meanings and for me it's very easy to understand what the meaning in the Chinese language is.

The word 'company' is incorrect here; it should be 'language' to make sense. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; replacing 'company' with 'language' corrects the meaning.

× once I forgot to bring my certificates to a job interview because my mind was preoccupated with other worries.

✓ once I forgot to bring my certificates to a job interview because my mind was preoccupied with other worries.

The word 'preoccupated' is incorrect; the correct past participle form is 'preoccupied'.

× which health we stay, organise, remember this thing and sure that I manage my time effectively and avoid necessary stress.

✓ which health we maintain, organise, remember these things and ensure that I manage my time effectively and avoid unnecessary stress.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect pronouns and word choices. 'Health we stay' is incorrect; 'health we maintain' is better. 'Remember this thing' should be 'remember these things' to agree in number. 'Sure' should be 'ensure'. 'Necessary stress' should be 'unnecessary stress' to convey the intended meaning.

× I usually remember important things by recording them in the Apple Looks app or writing them down on a piece of paper.

✓ I usually remember important things by recording them in the Apple Notes app or writing them down on a piece of paper.

The app name is 'Apple Notes', not 'Apple Looks'. This is a lexical error rather than a grammar error, but correcting it improves clarity.

× I also find it helpful to read the information along allow three or four times as this informs my memories.

✓ I also find it helpful to read the information aloud three or four times as this reinforces my memory.

'Along allow' is incorrect; it should be 'aloud'. 'Informs my memories' is awkward; 'reinforces my memory' is more natural and correct.

× This method works well for me because they allow me to reveal that information whenever I need.

✓ This method works well for me because it allows me to recall that information whenever I need to.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect because 'method' is singular; it should be 'it'. 'Reveal' is incorrect in this context; 'recall' is the appropriate verb. Also, 'whenever I need' should be 'whenever I need to' for completeness.