Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然，语法和表达存在错误，且内容重复。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免冗余，并注意语法正确。

例: No, I'm not good at memorising things. I often forget things quickly, and my friends joke that my memory is like a goldfish's, which is said to last only seven seconds.

提案: 回答不完整且语法混乱，缺乏连贯性和具体细节。建议完整叙述事件，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, last year my roommates planned a dinner, but my smartphone broke that afternoon. I had to restore it, and I forgot about the dinner because of that.

提案: 回答不够具体且表达不清晰。建议明确说明日常需要记住的具体事项，并用连词连接句子。

例: Since I have a bad memory, I try to live simply. I mainly need to remember important tasks like appointments and deadlines.

提案: 回答较为自然，但句子不完整且表达不够流畅。建议完整表达方法并使用连接词。

例: I remember important things by making memos on my smartphone or writing notes on labels and placing them where I can see them, for example, reminders to bring an umbrella.

× I can forget something Just after a few seconds, my friend always said my memory ability just like gold fish.

✓ I can forget something just after a few seconds. My friend always says my memory ability is just like a goldfish.

这里的主语是my friend，属于第三人称单数，谓语动词应该用第三人称单数形式'says'。另外，句子中缺少系动词'is'，应补充为'is just like a goldfish'。

× Because people said that golden fish have only seven seconds of.

✓ Because people say that goldfish have only seven seconds of memory.

这里的'golden fish'应为复数形式'goldfish'，且句子不完整，缺少'memory'。另外，时态应与上下文一致，使用一般现在时'say'。

× It was just last year my roommates decided to have a dinner together.

✓ It was just last year that my roommates decided to have dinner together.

句子中缺少连接词'that'，使句子结构完整。'a dinner'通常不加冠词，直接用'dinner'表示聚餐。

× On the night, but on the afternoon, my smartphone was broken and I have to restore it.

✓ On that night, but in the afternoon, my smartphone broke and I had to restore it.

句子结构混乱，'On the night'和'but on the afternoon'时间状语矛盾，应明确时间。'was broken'被动语态不合适，手机自己坏了用主动语态'broke'。时态应统一为过去时'had to restore'。

× After I restored.

✓ After I restored it.

句子不完整，缺少宾语'it'，且应与上下文保持过去时态。

× In the. I remember I have.

✓ In the end, I remember I had to do something.

句子不完整，缺少必要成分，导致表达不清。应补充完整表达。

× Well, I just know I have bad memory.

✓ Well, I just know that I have a bad memory.

'bad memory'前应加不定冠词'a'，使表达更自然。

× So I decide to live a simple life.

✓ So I have decided to live a simple life.

根据上下文，表达的是已经做出的决定，使用现在完成时更合适。

× So I have no need to remember everything just. Playing.

✓ So I have no need to remember everything, just playing.

句子断裂，缺少连接，且'just playing'表达不完整，应补充完整或改为'just by playing'等。

× I remember something by making memo on my smartphone or write something on a label and put it. In some I can see, for example, when I want to bring an umbre.

✓ I remember something by making a memo on my smartphone or writing something on a label and putting it somewhere I can see, for example, when I want to bring an umbrella.

'making memo'应为'making a memo'，'write'应改为'writing'保持形式一致，'put it. In some I can see'应为'putting it somewhere I can see'，'umbre'应为完整单词'umbrella'。