Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 'memory abilities' 대신 'memory'를 사용하고, 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하세요. 또한, 'almost think so my friends' 부분은 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 3~4문장 이내로 간결하게 유지하고, 친구들이 기억력이 좋다고 말한다는 내용을 명확히 표현하세요.

例: Yes, I have a good memory, and my friends often say that I am a memorizer because I can remember many things easily.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많아 이해하기 어렵습니다. 중요한 일을 잊은 경험을 간단명료하게 설명하고, 이유를 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 문장 구조를 단순하게 유지하고, 불필요한 단어는 제거하세요.

例: Yes, I once forgot an important lecture because I was busy preparing for a book test, so I missed the class.

提案: 답변이 다소 어색하고 문장이 길어 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 'special moment'를 주제로 명확한 주제문을 제시하고, 그 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 하고, 중복 표현을 피하세요.

例: I need to remember special moments in my life because they give me energy and happiness when I recall them later.

提案: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 'write to my note' 대신 'write notes'를 사용하고, 'strict to scheduler' 대신 'strict with my schedule'로 표현하세요. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 연결어를 적절히 사용하여 자연스럽게 만드세요.

例: I always write important things in my notes and strictly follow my schedule by checking it on my mobile phone.

× I have a good memory abilities so I can remember almost think so my friends.

✓ I have good memory abilities so I can remember almost everything like my friends.

'Memory abilities' is plural, so 'a good memory abilities' is incorrect. Also, 'almost think' should be 'almost everything'. The article 'a' should be removed before the plural noun 'abilities'.

× I have a good memory abilities so I can remember almost think so my friends.

✓ I have good memory abilities so I can remember almost everything like my friends.

The phrase 'almost think' is incorrect; it should be 'almost everything' to express the intended meaning. Also, 'so my friends' is unclear and should be 'like my friends'. These are plural and quantifier issues.

× I have a good memory abilities so I can remember almost think so my friends.

✓ I have good memory abilities, so I can remember almost everything like my friends.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and conjunction usage. Adding a comma before 'so' improves clarity and sentence structure.

× I forgot my important uh lecture because I prepared the IR to book test so I already have to do lecture but I forgot.

✓ I forgot my important lecture because I was preparing for the IR book test, so I had to attend the lecture but I forgot.

The sentence mixes tenses and has awkward phrasing. 'Prepared' should be 'was preparing' to indicate past continuous action. 'Already have to do lecture' is incorrect; it should be 'had to attend the lecture'.

× I forgot my important uh lecture because I prepared the IR to book test so I already have to do lecture but I forgot.

✓ I forgot my important lecture because I was preparing for the IR book test, so I had to attend the lecture but I forgot.

The preposition 'to' in 'prepared the IR to book test' is incorrect; it should be 'preparing for the IR book test'. Also, 'do lecture' is incorrect; 'attend the lecture' is appropriate.

× Special moment I have to remember for a long time because this special precious memory can reveal my energy I can gain.

✓ Special moments I have to remember for a long time because these special precious memories can reveal the energy I can gain.

'Special moment' should be plural 'special moments' to match the context. Similarly, 'this special precious memory' should be plural 'these special precious memories'.

× Special moment I have to remember for a long time because this special precious memory can reveal my energy I can gain.

✓ Special moments I have to remember for a long time because these special precious memories can reveal the energy I can gain.

The pronouns 'this' and 'my' are incorrectly used with plural nouns; they should be 'these' and 'the' respectively to agree with plural forms.

× Special moment I have to remember for a long time because this special precious memory can reveal my energy I can gain.

✓ I have to remember special moments for a long time because these special precious memories can reveal the energy I can gain.

The sentence structure is awkward; starting with 'Special moment' is incomplete. Reordering to 'I have to remember special moments' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I always write to my note about my important things, so I am very strict to scheduler.

✓ I always write in my notes about important things, so I am very strict with my schedule.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'write' and 'strict'. The correct prepositions are 'write in' and 'strict with'. Also, 'note' should be plural 'notes' and 'scheduler' should be 'schedule'.

× I always write to my note about my important things, so I am very strict to scheduler.

✓ I always write in my notes about important things, so I am very strict with my schedule.

'Note' should be plural 'notes' because people usually have multiple notes. 'Scheduler' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'schedule'.

× So I already write and check my schedule by online mobile phone.

✓ So I already write and check my schedule on my mobile phone online.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect here; 'on' is the correct preposition to indicate the device used. Also, 'online mobile phone' is awkward; 'mobile phone online' or 'on my mobile phone online' is better.