Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use more natural phrasing and correct prepositions, and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I am good at memorizing things" instead of "good in memorizing the things." Also, clarify and connect ideas smoothly using linking words.

例: Yes, I am good at memorizing things. For example, I always remember my parents' anniversary dates and my friends' birthdays. Additionally, I can recognize people's faces when I have met them before.

提案: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid unclear phrases like "That's the my thing, I forget." Instead, explain the situation clearly and add a linking phrase to make it coherent.

例: Yes, once I went to the gym but forgot my membership card. It was frustrating because I couldn't enter without it.

提案: Use clearer and more natural expressions. Avoid confusing phrases like "stay hybrid myself." Also, organize your ideas logically with linking words and provide specific examples.

例: There are many things I need to remember daily. For instance, staying healthy is very important to me. Besides that, I always make sure to take my phone with me, eat properly, and exercise regularly.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and avoid repetition. Correct phrases like "prefer the not" to "prefer the note." Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually use the notes app on my phone to remember important things, especially when I'm in a hurry or going shopping. This method helps me stay organized and not forget anything.

× Yes, I am good in memorizing the things.

✓ Yes, I am good at memorizing things.

The correct preposition to use with 'good' when referring to ability is 'at', not 'in'. Also, 'the things' is unnecessary here; 'things' is sufficient.

× For instance I remember the dates for my parents anniversary and my friend birthday parties.

✓ For instance, I remember the dates for my parents' anniversaries and my friends' birthday parties.

'Parents' and 'friends' are plural possessives, so apostrophes are needed. Also, 'anniversary' and 'birthday parties' should be plural to match multiple events.

× Also I have recognized the people face when I'm whoever I met before.

✓ Also, I have recognized people's faces when I have met them before.

'People face' is incorrect; it should be 'people's faces' to show possession. 'I'm whoever I met before' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'I have met them before' to express past experience.

× Yes, one day I went to the gym and I just forgot my gym membership card.

✓ Yes, one day I went to the gym and I forgot my gym membership card.

The word 'just' is unnecessary here and can be omitted for clarity. The past tense 'forgot' is correctly used.

× That's the my thing, I forget.

✓ That's my thing, I forget.

The phrase 'the my thing' is incorrect; 'my thing' is sufficient without 'the'.

× The things are a part and a parcel of a life we have to remember every day.

✓ These things are a part and parcel of life we have to remember every day.

'The things' is vague; 'these things' is clearer. 'A life' should be 'life' as a general concept. Also, the phrase is 'a part and parcel' not 'a part and a parcel'.

× For example, stay hybrid myself.

✓ For example, staying hydrated myself.

'Stay hybrid' is incorrect; likely intended 'stay hydrated'. Also, 'myself' is unnecessary here and should be omitted or rephrased.

× That's the one of the most important thing for me.

✓ That's one of the most important things for me.

'The one of the most important thing' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the most important things' to match plural form.

× And other than that, taking a phone with myself, eating properly, good exercise.

✓ And other than that, taking my phone with me, eating properly, and getting good exercise.

'Taking a phone with myself' is incorrect; it should be 'taking my phone with me'. Also, the list needs conjunctions and parallel structure.

× I always use a note in my phone to remember the things, especially when I am in a hurry or go outside to do some shopping.

✓ I always use a note on my phone to remember things, especially when I am in a hurry or go outside to do some shopping.

The correct preposition is 'on my phone' not 'in my phone'. Also, 'the things' is unnecessary; 'things' is sufficient.

× So I always use a note and prefer the not.

✓ So I always use a note and prefer the note.

'Prefer the not' is a typo; it should be 'prefer the note'.