Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but contains some redundancy and unclear phrasing. Try to be more concise and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, improve sentence structure and grammar, for example, say 'I am not very good at memorizing things, but after some effort, I can remember certain information easily. However, I struggle with memorizing dates, especially those related to prehistoric times or Indian history.'

例: I am not very good at memorizing things, but after some effort, I can remember certain information easily. However, I struggle with memorizing dates, especially those related to prehistoric times or Indian history.

提案: Your answer provides a relevant example but is somewhat repetitive and contains filler words. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily and improve grammar, for example, 'Yes, I have forgotten important things several times. For instance, once when I went for permanent registration in the dental field, I forgot my SSE certificate. As a result, I had to return home to get it, which was quite inconvenient.'

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things several times. For instance, once when I went for permanent registration in the dental field, I forgot my SSE certificate. As a result, I had to return home to get it, which was quite inconvenient.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and provide specific supporting details using linking words. For example, 'In my daily life, I need to remember to complete tasks assigned by my teachers or parents. These tasks vary and often involve different steps or procedures.'

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to complete tasks assigned by my teachers or parents. These tasks vary and often involve different steps or procedures.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'I usually use a To-Do List to remember important things. I prepare the list the night before and check off each item as I complete it. This helps me stay organized and know what to do next.'

例: I usually use a To-Do List to remember important things. I prepare the list the night before and check off each item as I complete it. This helps me stay organized and know what to do next.

× Uh, but most important it I'm very bad at memorizing the dates, uh, which are related to the prehistoric era or they're related to the history of the India.

✓ Uh, but most importantly, I'm very bad at memorizing dates, uh, which are related to the prehistoric era or related to the history of India.

The phrase 'most important it' is incorrect; it should be 'most importantly' to function as an adverb. Also, 'the dates' should be 'dates' because we are talking about dates in general, not specific ones. 'The history of the India' is incorrect because 'India' does not need the definite article 'the'.

× Yes, of course I have, uh, there is a very frequent time I keep forgetting important things, uh, such as documentation.

✓ Yes, of course I have, uh, there are frequent times when I keep forgetting important things, uh, such as documentation.

The phrase 'there is a very frequent time' is incorrect because 'time' is countable here and plural is needed. 'There are frequent times' is correct. Also, 'when' is needed to connect the clause properly.

× The task are are of the various options and it was it include various procedures for it.

✓ The tasks are of various types and they include various procedures.

The word 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to agree with the plural verb 'are'. The phrase 'are of the various options' is awkward; 'are of various types' is clearer. Also, 'it was it include' is incorrect; it should be 'they include' to agree with plural 'tasks'.

× The as such most important thing which I had to remember in the daily life is the completing task which is given by with the faculty or my parents itself.

✓ The most important thing I have to remember in daily life is completing tasks given by the faculty or my parents themselves.

The phrase 'given by with the faculty' is incorrect; it should be 'given by the faculty'. 'The as such most important thing' is awkward and unnecessary; 'The most important thing' suffices. 'In the daily life' should be 'in daily life'. 'My parents itself' is incorrect; 'themselves' is the correct reflexive pronoun for plural 'parents'.

× The least preferred method which I use is To Do List.

✓ The least preferred method I use is the To-Do List.

'To Do List' should be hyphenated as 'To-Do List' as it is a compound noun. Also, the sentence is acceptable but adding 'the' before 'To-Do List' is more natural.

× I usually make the list and a night before and mark as I complete the each particular item I mark in the To Do List.

✓ I usually make the list the night before and mark each particular item as I complete it in the To-Do List.

The phrase 'and a night before' is incorrect; it should be 'the night before'. 'Mark as I complete the each particular item' is awkward; it should be 'mark each particular item as I complete it'. Also, 'To Do List' should be 'To-Do List'.

× So it could give me a better understanding to to what to do the next step.

✓ So it gives me a better understanding of what to do next.

The phrase 'to to what to do the next step' is incorrect and redundant. It should be 'of what to do next' for clarity and correctness. Also, 'could give' is changed to 'gives' to match the habitual action.