Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as repeating 'things' and improve sentence structure for better flow. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising. For instance, I often forget simple details like what I had for dinner yesterday because I don't concentrate well. Therefore, I want to improve my focus in daily life.

提案: Your answer contains hesitations and unclear phrasing which affects clarity. Try to organise your ideas logically and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to explain cause and effect clearly.

例: Yes, I once forgot a speaking test that was part of my university entrance exam. Since it was very important, missing it caused me to fail, which was very disappointing.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to use correct terms and sentence structures. Also, use linking words like 'also' or 'in addition' to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually take notes on my smartphone because it's convenient to check them anytime. In addition, I sometimes write reminders on paper and stick them on the refrigerator or wall for easy access.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence.

例: I usually remember important things by taking notes straight away. For example, when I needed to remember a test date, I added it to my calendar app, which makes it much easier to recall. This method effectively helps me avoid forgetting important information.

× I always struggled with memorizing things, even simple things.

✓ I have always struggled with memorizing things, even simple things.

The sentence refers to an ongoing difficulty up to the present, so the present perfect tense 'have struggled' is more appropriate than the simple past 'struggled'.

× I often forgot what I heard for dinner yesterday.

✓ I often forgot what I ate for dinner yesterday.

The verb 'heard' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'ate' to describe what was consumed for dinner. Also, 'forgot' is correct as it refers to a past event.

× I want to improve the concentration for my life.

✓ I want to improve my concentration in daily life.

The phrase 'improve the concentration for my life' is awkward; 'improve my concentration in daily life' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× I have forgotten a speaking test which uh proves that it's separated from other skills dates and uh, since that test influenced by entrance exam of university, I couldn't miss it.

✓ I forgot a speaking test which, uh, shows that it's separate from other skill dates and, uh, since that test is influenced by the university entrance exam, I couldn't miss it.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and awkward phrasing. 'Have forgotten' should be 'forgot' for a specific past event. 'Proves' should be 'shows' for clarity. 'Separated' should be 'separate' as an adjective. 'Influenced' needs 'is' to form the passive present tense 'is influenced'.

× However, uh, I failed it because of it and it makes me so disappointed.

✓ However, uh, I failed it because of that and it made me very disappointed.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Makes' should be 'made' to match the past event 'failed'. 'Because of it' is better as 'because of that' for clarity.

× I usually use not taking up in my smartphone, which is so useful because I can watch what I have written, uh, anytime.

✓ I usually take notes on my smartphone, which is very useful because I can check what I have written anytime.

'Use not taking up in my smartphone' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'take notes on my smartphone'. Also, 'watch' is incorrect; 'check' or 'review' is appropriate for notes.

× Moreover, I sometimes use paper to remember which can put, uh, which can be put on refrigerator or wall and easy to watch.

✓ Moreover, I sometimes use paper notes which can be put on the refrigerator or wall and are easy to see.

The sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect prepositions. 'Use paper to remember' should be 'use paper notes'. 'Can put' should be 'can be put'. 'On refrigerator or wall' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Easy to watch' should be 'easy to see'.

× I usually remember important things by taking notes immediately.

✓ I usually remember important things by taking notes immediately.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× For instance, when I had to remember the date of the test, I added to my calendar app, which is much easier to remember.

✓ For instance, when I had to remember the date of the test, I added it to my calendar app, which makes it much easier to remember.

The sentence is mostly correct but missing the object 'it' after 'added'. Also, 'which is much easier to remember' should be 'which makes it much easier to remember' for clarity.

× Overall, this method prevents me from forgetting crucial information.

✓ Overall, this method prevents me from forgetting crucial information.

This sentence is correct and requires no correction.