Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应更直接地回应问题，避免含糊其辞。同时，句子结构应更简洁自然，避免重复和冗长。可以增加连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I'm not very good at memorising facts, but I always try to remember happy moments, such as trips with my friends and family, because they are very special to me.

提案: 回答中存在重复词汇和语法错误，影响流畅度。应避免重复，使用连接词使句子更连贯，并且表达更自然。

例: Yes, last month I forgot my best friend's birthday because I was busy writing an academic essay, and I felt really sorry about it.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。应使用正确的语法结构，避免重复，并用连接词使内容更连贯。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember basic tasks such as washing my clothes, cooking meals, and buying food like vegetables and meat.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和不必要的赘述，应简洁表达并使用连接词使句子更流畅自然。

例: I usually write important things down in my mobile phone's memo app, so I can check them anytime and anywhere.

× I'm not sure whether I am good at memorizing, but I would like to remember some happy moments with others, for example whenever I have a trip with my friends and families.

✓ I'm not sure whether I am good at memorizing, but I would like to remember some happy moments with others, for example whenever I have a trip with my friends and family.

这里的“families”应改为“family”，因为指的是“家人”作为一个整体，使用单数形式。

× Oh yes, it just happened last month I I have forgotten my best friend's birthday because I I was busy with my academic essay so I just forgot it.

✓ Oh yes, it just happened last month. I forgot my best friend's birthday because I was busy with my academic essay, so I just forgot it.

这里“have forgotten”应改为一般过去时“forgot”，因为事件发生在过去的具体时间点“last month”。另外，句子中重复的“I I”应删除一个，且句子应分开更清晰。

× I have to maybe have to remember some basic daily things, for example like washing my clothes or do some meals for myself or go out for buy some food, vegetables, meat.

✓ I maybe have to remember some basic daily things, for example washing my clothes, cooking some meals for myself, or going out to buy some food, vegetables, and meat.

这里“do some meals”应改为“cooking some meals”，动词后应使用动名词形式。短语“go out for buy”应改为“going out to buy”，保持动词形式一致。

× Well, I would say I always choose to write them down or keep them, keep them in the record in my memo, in in my mobile phone so that I can open it and see them at any time and it's everywhere.

✓ Well, I would say I always choose to write them down or keep them in the record in my memo, in my mobile phone so that I can open it and see them at any time; it's everywhere.

这里“keep them, keep them”重复，应删除一个。句子中“keep them in the record in my memo”表达较为冗长，可简化。句子连接处应使用分号或句号分开，避免句子过长。