Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, provide specific examples to support your answer.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, my parents often tell me important information like passport details, and I usually remember them well.

提案: Your answer is too long and confusing with grammatical mistakes. Try to make your answer concise and clear, using proper sentence structure and linking words to explain the situation logically.

例: Yes, I once forgot my house key at my friend's place while studying there. My parents were upset, but I rarely make such mistakes.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and linking words. Also, avoid repetition and use correct verb forms. Try to be more specific and coherent.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember new vocabulary because I attend English coaching classes. Therefore, I spend about 30 minutes every day learning new words and practising them through reading exercises.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily and correct minor grammar errors.

例: I find it easy to remember important things because I set reminders on my mobile phone. This helps me recall items like my house key and passwords, including those of my parents.

× Even my parents tell me important things that I will remember them in futures like a passport and any kind of information that is important for them.

✓ Even my parents tell me important things that I will remember in the future, like a passport and any kind of information that is important to them.

The phrase 'remember them in futures' is incorrect. 'Remember' does not require the pronoun 'them' here, and 'futures' should be singular 'future'. Also, 'important for them' should be 'important to them' as the correct preposition with 'important' is 'to'. Use 'in the future' to indicate time.

× Yes, I remember one day my parents gave me a key of my house and I forgot this key in my friends when I studying in my friend house and they also scold me about that mishappening and even I do this type of mistakes little bit not every time.

✓ Yes, I remember one day my parents gave me the key to my house and I forgot this key at my friend's place when I was studying at my friend's house, and they also scolded me about that mishap. Even now, I make this type of mistake a little bit, but not every time.

Several errors: 'key of my house' should be 'key to my house' (preposition use). 'in my friends' should be 'at my friend's place' (preposition and possessive). 'when I studying' should be 'when I was studying' (past continuous tense). 'scold me' should be 'scolded me' (past tense). 'mishappening' is better as 'mishap'. 'I do this type of mistakes little bit' is incorrect; corrected to 'I make this type of mistake a little bit'.

× The most things I have to remember in my daily life is vocabulary because I joined my English coaching classes so my teacher gave me some vocab to learn at home.

✓ The most important thing I have to remember in my daily life is vocabulary because I joined my English coaching classes, so my teacher gave me some vocabulary to learn at home.

'The most things' is incorrect; it should be 'The most important thing' because 'thing' is singular here. Also, 'vocab' is informal; 'vocabulary' is better in this context.

× So I try to spend a 30 minutes daily to learn vocabs and even they also give me some reading options so I also uses vocab in then.

✓ So I try to spend 30 minutes daily to learn vocabulary, and they also give me some reading options, so I also use vocabulary in them.

'a 30 minutes' is incorrect; '30 minutes' does not need 'a'. 'vocabs' is incorrect plural; 'vocabulary' is uncountable. 'uses' should be 'use' to agree with 'I'. 'in then' should be 'in them' (pronoun).

× It is not a very difficult thing for me because I set a timer in my mobile phone.

✓ It is not a very difficult thing for me because I set a timer on my mobile phone.

The correct preposition with 'set a timer' and 'mobile phone' is 'on', not 'in'.

× It helps me a lot to remember important things like where is my own house key and sometimes my Instagram passwords even.

✓ It helps me a lot to remember important things like where my own house key is and sometimes even my Instagram passwords.

The sentence structure is awkward. 'Where is my own house key' should be 'where my own house key is' to fit the sentence. 'Passwords even' should be 'even my passwords' for correct emphasis.

× I also remember my parents password also.

✓ I also remember my parents' password.

'parents password' needs possessive apostrophe: 'parents''. Also, 'also' is redundant at the end since 'also' is already at the start.