Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且表达混乱，句子结构不完整，缺乏连贯性。建议简化表达，直接回答问题，并用清晰的句子说明原因。

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things, especially positive experiences. For example, I clearly remember when my parents took me to a theme park during my childhood, which made me very happy.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够流畅。建议使用正确时态和连词，使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, last month I forgot my best friend's birthday, but I remembered it a week later.

提案: 回答内容较具体，但句子结构不够清晰，连接词使用不足。建议调整句子顺序，使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: As a jewelry designer, I need to remember different gemstones and metals. This knowledge helps me communicate with clients and create new designs.

提案: 表达不够准确，语法和用词有误。建议使用正确的表达方式描述记忆方法，并注意句子连贯。

例: When I think something is important, I usually write it down in my schedule book or on paper. I also set two or three reminders on my phone before the day.

× I think I'm good at memory things, but it's just about the good things because I also remember when I was child, my parents take me to the theme park when I was the student was a teacher to make me happy. So yes.

✓ I think I'm good at memorising things, but it's just about the good things because I also remember when I was a child, my parents took me to the theme park when I was a student and a teacher to make me happy. So yes.

这里“memory things”应改为“memorising things”，因为“memory”是名词，不能直接修饰“things”，应使用动名词形式“memorising”。“child”前缺少冠词“a”，应为“a child”。“parents take”时态错误，应该用过去式“took”。“the student was a teacher”结构混乱，应分开为“when I was a student and a teacher”。

× When sometime I was forgetting something important, for example last month I forget my best friend's birthday and after one week I just remember that.

✓ Sometimes I forgot something important, for example last month I forgot my best friend's birthday and after one week I just remembered that.

“was forgetting”时态不合适，描述过去习惯或事实应使用一般过去时“forgot”。“forget”应为过去式“forgot”，与时间状语“last month”一致。“remember”应为过去式“remembered”。

× Because I'm a jewelry designer so I need to remember different gemstones or metal to help me contact with the client or to make the new design.

✓ Because I'm a jewelry designer, I need to remember different gemstones or metals to help me contact the client or to make new designs.

“metal”应使用复数“metals”，因为前面有“different”表示多种。“contact with the client”中“contact”是动词，后面不需要介词“with”，应直接加宾语“contact the client”。“the new design”应改为复数“new designs”，表示多种设计。

× Because I'm a jewelry designer so I need to remember different gemstones or metal to help me contact with the client or to make the new design.

✓ Because I'm a jewelry designer, I need to remember different gemstones or metals to help me contact the client or to make new designs.

“contact with”是不正确的搭配，动词“contact”后直接加宾语，不需要介词“with”。

× When I think it is the important thing, I usually make it down to my schedule book or the paper schedule and also I will make 2 to 3 signal to by myself in the phone before the day.

✓ When I think it is an important thing, I usually write it down in my schedule book or on paper, and also I will set 2 to 3 signals for myself on the phone before the day.

“make it down to”应改为“write it down in/on”，表示记下来。“schedule book or the paper schedule”表达不自然，改为“schedule book or on paper”。“make 2 to 3 signal to by myself in the phone”结构错误，应为“set 2 to 3 signals for myself on the phone”。“before the day”应更具体，如“before the day comes”，但此处保持原意。

× When I think it is the important thing, I usually make it down to my schedule book or the paper schedule and also I will make 2 to 3 signal to by myself in the phone before the day.

✓ When I think it is an important thing, I usually write it down in my schedule book or on paper, and also I will set 2 to 3 signals for myself on the phone before the day.

“the important thing”前应使用不定冠词“an”，因为这里指的是泛指的重要事情，而非特指。