Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to avoid redundancy and provide a clear, concise response. Also, avoid unclear abbreviations like 'Rd.' Instead, directly state your difficulty with memorising, and give a brief reason or example to support your answer.

例: I'm not very good at memorising things, especially when studying, because I find it hard to retain a lot of information at once.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by structuring it more clearly. Start with a direct answer, then explain the situation with linking words to make it coherent. Also, avoid contradictory phrases like 'I remember vividly' followed by 'I totally lost it from my memory'.

例: Yes, I have forgotten something important. For example, I had a doctor's appointment that I had been waiting for months, but on the day, I completely forgot about it, which was very disappointing.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about what you need to remember.

例: In daily life, I need to remember to stay organized and manage my time well so that I can complete all my tasks efficiently.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has repetition and could be more concise. Use linking words to explain your method clearly and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: I use a tactic to remember important things by writing them in my diary, because once I write them down, it's easier to recall them later.

× I find Rd. learning not so easy.

✓ I find reading not so easy.

The phrase 'Rd. learning' is incorrect; 'Rd.' is an abbreviation and should be replaced with the full word 'reading' in its present participle form to make the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× I won't forget my appointment at the doctor, which I have been waiting for months and when the day came I totally lost it from my memory and that was the awful thing.

✓ I won't forget my appointment at the doctor, which I had been waiting for months, and when the day came, I totally lost it from my memory, and that was the awful thing.

The sentence mixes present perfect 'have been waiting' with past events. Since the appointment day has passed, past perfect 'had been waiting' is appropriate to indicate the waiting happened before the appointment day. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× In daily life, it is crucial to remember to stay organized and the time management.

✓ In daily life, it is crucial to remember to stay organized and manage time.

The phrase 'the time management' is incorrect here because 'time management' is an uncountable noun and does not require the definite article 'the'. Also, 'manage time' is a better collocation than 'the time management' in this context.

× It is important to remember to maintain the maintain all the task.

✓ It is important to remember to maintain all the tasks.

The sentence has repetition 'maintain the maintain' which is incorrect. Also, 'all the task' should be plural 'all the tasks' to agree with the quantifier 'all'. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and corrects plural form.

× I have a tactic to remember the important matters. I write it in the diary so that I I will be able to remember that because after writing it down on a paper it it is easy to remember that thing thing.

✓ I have a tactic to remember important matters. I write them in the diary so that I will be able to remember them because after writing them down on paper, it is easy to remember those things.

The original sentence has repeated words ('I I', 'it it', 'thing thing') which are errors. Also, pronouns 'it' are incorrectly used for plural 'matters' and 'things'; they should be 'them' and 'those things' respectively. The corrected sentence fixes these pronoun errors and removes repetitions.