Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your preference with supporting details.

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising. When I was at university, I struggled with courses that required memorisation because I prefer to understand concepts rather than just remember facts.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar by structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' correctly to make your answer coherent. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, I once left my mobile phone at home when I had to go to university. This was a problem because the university is far from my house, and I needed my phone to check the bus schedule.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Provide specific details and avoid incomplete sentences to improve coherence.

例: As a Muslim, I need to remember the schedule of daily prayers because the exact times change slightly depending on the season. Therefore, I always keep track of prayer times to perform them on time.

提案: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Start with a topic sentence, then explain your method with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid vague or incomplete phrases.

例: I rely on my own methods to remember important things. For instance, I use my phone to create a schedule, listing tasks for today and tomorrow. This helps me stay organized and complete my work on time.

× No, I am not good at all of memorizing.

✓ No, I am not good at memorizing at all.

The phrase 'at all of memorizing' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'good at memorizing' and 'at all' should come at the end for emphasis. The verb 'memorizing' is correctly used as a gerund here.

× when the course was about memorizing, I just failed because I don't like memorizing.

✓ when the course was about memorizing, I just failed because I didn't like memorizing.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the event happened in the past, 'don't like' should be changed to 'didn't like' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Yes I have. I forget my mobile phone at home and I should go to university and then because the university is far away from my house so I need my my phone to to know how I hold back.

✓ Yes, I have. I forgot my mobile phone at home and I had to go to university. Because the university is far away from my house, I needed my phone to know how to get back.

The verbs 'forget' and 'should go' are incorrectly used in present and modal forms instead of past tense. 'Forget' should be 'forgot', 'should go' should be 'had to go', and 'need' should be 'needed' to reflect past events. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I need my my phone to to know how I hold back.

✓ I needed my phone to know how to get back.

The phrase 'my my phone' is a repetition error. Also, 'to to know' is repeated. 'How I hold back' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'how to get back'. The pronouns and verb forms are corrected accordingly.

× So keeping track of us perform or relaxed.

✓ So keeping track of when we perform or relax.

The phrase 'us perform or relaxed' is incorrect. It should be 'when we perform or relax' to correctly use the pronoun and verb forms. 'Relaxed' should be 'relax' to match the present tense.

× I will truly on my way of remember things.

✓ I truly rely on my way of remembering things.

The phrase 'I will truly on' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I truly rely on'. Also, 'remember' should be 'remembering' as a gerund after 'way of'.

× I do this in my phone as a schedule that today we will.

✓ I use my phone to make a schedule like 'Today I will...'.

The phrase 'I do this in my phone' is awkward; 'use my phone' is better. Also, 'that today we will' is unclear; it should be 'like Today I will...' to indicate planned activities.

× I will do this and this and this tomorrow I will do this and this and this when I finish this things.

✓ I will do this and that, and tomorrow I will do other things when I finish these tasks.

The repetition of 'this and this and this' is unnatural. Also, 'this things' is incorrect; it should be 'these tasks' to match plural form and clarity.

× I booked a check in front.

✓ I make a checklist in advance.

The phrase 'booked a check in front' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'make a checklist beforehand' or 'in advance'. The preposition and verb choice are corrected accordingly.