Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“memory things”应为“memorising things”，且句子结构较为混乱。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和词汇，使表达更自然流畅。

例: When I was a child, I was quite good at memorising things because I had fewer distractions. However, as I grew older, I found it harder to remember details like people's faces and passport numbers because I haven't practiced memorising recently.

提案: 回答内容较为完整，但表达有些重复和不够简洁，如“for a number for an important study related tasks”表达不清晰。建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子结构，同时注意连贯性。

例: Once, I forgot my passport number at home on a day when I needed it for an important study-related task. As a result, I couldn't complete some tasks, which made the day stressful. This experience taught me to always double-check my belongings before leaving.

提案: 回答中时态使用不当，且表达不够清晰，逻辑上有些矛盾。建议明确表达需要记住的内容，并使用正确的时态和连贯的句子。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember important dates related to my family, such as birthdays and anniversaries, because I value spending quality time with them and maintaining strong relationships.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，如“for remember of the many people today use their phones to note things”和“and I can and in this way I can remember lately”不通顺。建议简化句子，使用正确的语法，并清晰表达观点。

例: I usually write important things in a notebook or planner because I find it more effective than using a phone. Writing by hand helps me focus better and remember things more easily.

× Well, when I was a child I was quite good at memory things because at that time I didn't have many things to do, so it was easy for me to remember things.

✓ Well, when I was a child I was quite good at memorising things because at that time I didn't have many things to do, so it was easy for me to remember things.

这里“memory things”用法错误，应该用动词的-ing形式“memorising”表示记忆的动作。动词+ing形式用来表示正在进行的动作或习惯性动作。

× However, when I grew up, I found it difficult for me to remember things like people's faces and passport numbers because I really practiced memory these days.

✓ However, when I grew up, I found it difficult for me to remember things like people's faces and passport numbers because I haven't really practiced memory these days.

句中“practiced”用过去式与“these days”时间状语不符，应使用现在完成时“haven't really practiced”表示最近一段时间的情况。

× Well, I once forgot my passport numbers at home on a day when I needed it for a number for an important study related tasks.

✓ Well, I once forgot my passport number at home on a day when I needed it for an important study-related task.

“passport numbers”应为单数“passport number”，因为通常每人只有一个护照号码；“study related tasks”应为“study-related task”，修饰词需要连字符且任务为单数。

× Because of that I couldn't complete some important tasks which made the whole day quite stressful and challenging.

✓ Because of that, I couldn't complete some important tasks, which made the whole day quite stressful and challenging.

句中缺少逗号，影响句子结构和理解。虽然不是严格的情态动词错误，但逗号的使用属于语法结构调整。

× This experience taught me always double check my belongings before leaving.

✓ This experience taught me to always double-check my belongings before leaving.

“taught me always double check”结构不正确，动词“teach”后应接不定式“to double-check”，且“double check”应连写为“double-check”。

× Well, I didn't need to remember important data related to my family, such as birthdays and anniversaries.

✓ Well, I don't need to remember important data related to my family, such as birthdays and anniversaries.

句子描述的是现在的情况，应使用一般现在时“don't need”，而非过去时“didn't need”。

× This is because I really spend quality time with them and want to maintain a strong relationship.

✓ This is because I really spend quality time with them and want to maintain a strong relationship.

该句无明显语法错误，符合语境。

× Well, I usually prefer to write important things in a notebook or a planner because I find it more effective for remember of the many people today use their phones to note things.

✓ Well, I usually prefer to write important things in a notebook or a planner because I find it more effective for remembering, as many people today use their phones to note things.

“for remember”应改为“for remembering”，动词后接介词时动词需用-ing形式；句子后半部分缺少连接词“as”使句意连贯。

× I feel that writing by hand helps me focus better and I can and in this way I can remember lately.

✓ I feel that writing by hand helps me focus better, and in this way I can remember things better lately.

原句结构混乱，“I can and in this way”不通顺，需调整为“and in this way I can remember things better lately”使句子完整且逻辑清晰。