Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'pretty good' and 'very fast' together. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things because I can recall information faster than most of my classmates.

提案: The answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly with correct grammar. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I rarely forget important things because I make sure to keep reminders and stay organised.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Provide a clear topic sentence and specific examples. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember official tasks and college assignments, as well as some common personal errands.

提案: Good explanation with supporting details. To improve, use more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence.

例: Since I am an auditory learner, I find it easier to remember information by listening carefully. Moreover, I practise recalling important details every few hours, which helps me retain them effectively for a long time.

× I can remember things very fast as compared to many of the students in my class.

✓ I can remember things very fast compared to many students in my class.

The phrase 'many of the students' is unnecessarily wordy; 'many students' is more natural and grammatically correct here. Also, 'as compared to' is better replaced with 'compared to' for smoother expression.

× No, not most of the times I don't remember I had forgotten any important thing.

✓ No, most of the time I don't remember having forgotten any important thing.

The phrase 'not most of the times' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'most of the time'. Also, 'I had forgotten' should be in present perfect form 'having forgotten' to match the context.

× I most probably remember every important things in my life.

✓ I most probably remember every important thing in my life.

'Every' is followed by a singular noun, so 'things' should be 'thing' to maintain singular agreement.

× Some most probably official things, and college as I mentioned, all not mostly few common things.

✓ Some are most probably official things related to college, as I mentioned, and a few common things.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding verbs and restructuring improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I can recall things very quickly and retain it for a long period of time.

✓ I can recall things very quickly and retain them for a long period of time.

'Things' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it' to agree in number.