Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "academic memories" which is unclear. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say "I'm good at memorizing academic material because I enjoy studying, but I find it harder to remember names or historical dates."

例: I'm good at memorizing academic material because I enjoy studying. However, I find it difficult to remember people's names or historical dates because they don't interest me as much.

提案: Your answer is understandable but a bit repetitive and slightly unclear. Try to organize your answer with linking words and avoid repeating "forgot". For example, "Yes, I once missed my friend's wedding because I noted the wrong date in my calendar."

例: Yes, I once missed my friend's wedding because I wrote the wrong date in my calendar. I was very excited about her marriage, but this mistake caused me to forget the actual day.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and incomplete ideas. Try to be more specific and coherent. Use linking words to explain your points clearly. For example, "In daily life, I need to remember many tasks, but I often forget to drink water and eat regularly because I don't have a habit of eating when others are around."

例: In my daily life, I have to remember many tasks. However, I often forget to drink water and eat on time because I don't like eating when others are nearby.

提案: Your answer is good but can be more fluent and natural by avoiding fillers like "uh" and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I prepare a to-do list the night before and prioritize tasks to ensure I don't forget anything important."

例: I prepare a to-do list the night before and prioritize my tasks. This helps me manage my activities efficiently and avoid forgetting important things.

× I find it longer to memorize such details.

✓ I find it harder to memorize such details.

The phrase 'find it longer' is incorrect because 'longer' is a comparative adjective related to length or duration, not difficulty. The correct expression is 'find it harder' to indicate difficulty in memorizing.

× Yes, I've forgotten something important such as missing my friend's wedding.

✓ Yes, I've forgotten something important, such as missing my friend's wedding.

The sentence is grammatically correct but missing a comma after 'important' to separate the clause for clarity.

× I was really so overwhelmed about her getting married, but I forgot to get the right date in the calendar so I thought it was on the other day and I really forgot.

✓ I was really so overwhelmed about her getting married, but I forgot to check the right date in the calendar, so I thought it was on another day and I really forgot.

The phrase 'forgot to get the right date' is incorrect; 'forgot to check the right date' is appropriate. Also, 'on the other day' should be 'on another day' to indicate a different day.

× In my daily life I need to remember a wide variety of works but for me which I which I forget is about drinking water and eating foods because I don't really have a habit of having food or drinks whenever someone is around.

✓ In my daily life, I need to remember a wide variety of tasks, but what I often forget is to drink water and eat food because I don't really have a habit of eating or drinking whenever someone is around.

The phrase 'which I which I forget' is repetitive and incorrect. 'Works' should be 'tasks' or 'things'. 'Eating foods' should be 'eat food' as 'food' is uncountable. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× Also I have a very small app.

✓ Also, I have a very small appetite.

The word 'app' is likely a typo or incorrect word choice. The intended word is 'appetite' to express a small desire for food. Adding a comma after 'Also' improves sentence flow.

× I remember important things by preparing A to do list, uh, for the next day at the previous night.

✓ I remember important things by preparing a to-do list for the next day the night before.

The article 'A' should be lowercase 'a' and 'to do list' should be hyphenated as 'to-do list'. 'At the previous night' is incorrect; 'the night before' is the correct expression.

× And I uh, do activities by sequencing it according to the prioritization and make it easier for me and not to miss my thing in the last moment.

✓ I do activities by sequencing them according to priority to make it easier for me and not miss anything at the last moment.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal; it's better to omit it. 'Sequencing it' should be 'sequencing them' to agree with 'activities'. 'According to the prioritization' is better as 'according to priority'. 'Not to miss my thing' is unclear; 'not miss anything' is clearer. 'In the last moment' should be 'at the last moment'.