Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors such as "ability of memorizing" (should be "ability to memorize") and "all of the lesson that my teacher teach" (should be "all the lessons my teacher taught"). Try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorizing. For example, I can remember most of the lessons my teacher teaches at school, and I usually retain that knowledge even after I get home.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well but could be improved by correcting grammar and making the story clearer. Use linking words like "for instance" or "once" to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating "forgot" in the same sentence.

例: Although I am generally good at memorizing, I have made mistakes. For instance, once I forgot about a date with my girlfriend, which made her very angry.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more specific and concise. Use linking words to organize your ideas and avoid awkward phrases like "know remember". Also, clarify what "the time to go to school to the actual class" means.

例: As a student, I need to remember the time my classes start and the lessons I learn each day. This helps me stay organized and perform well in school.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and linking words to improve clarity. For example, say "I make a list of about five important things" and explain why this helps you.

例: I usually make a list of about five important tasks to remember. This method makes it easier for me to organize and complete what I need to do.

× Well, I am quite proud of my ability of memorizing.

✓ Well, I am quite proud of my ability to memorize.

The phrase 'ability of memorizing' is incorrect. The correct preposition to use with 'ability' is 'to' followed by the base verb form. Therefore, 'ability to memorize' is correct.

× I can memorize a lot of knowledge that I learned at school and until I go home, I still can remember all of the lesson that my teacher teach.

✓ I can memorize a lot of knowledge that I learned at school and until I go home, I can still remember all of the lessons that my teacher teaches.

'Lesson' should be plural 'lessons' because it refers to multiple lessons. Also, 'teach' should be 'teaches' to agree with the singular subject 'my teacher' (third person singular).

× Although I am good at memorizing, I still make a lot of mistakes, particularly once I have forgotten to meet my girlfriend and I forgot about our date before she was very angry with me.

✓ Although I am good at memorizing, I still make a lot of mistakes, particularly once when I forgot to meet my girlfriend and I forgot about our date, so she was very angry with me.

The phrase 'once I have forgotten' is incorrect because 'have forgotten' (present perfect) does not fit with the past narrative. It should be 'once when I forgot' to indicate a specific past event. Also, 'before she was very angry' is better expressed as 'so she was very angry' to show cause and effect.

× Well, as a student I need to memorize the time to go to school to the actual class and I also need to know remember the lesson and the knowledge that I was taught at school.

✓ Well, as a student I need to memorize the time to go to school and to the actual class, and I also need to remember the lessons and the knowledge that I was taught at school.

The phrase 'time to go to school to the actual class' is awkward; it should be 'time to go to school and to the actual class'. Also, 'know remember' is incorrect; it should be just 'remember'. 'Lesson' should be plural 'lessons' to match the context.

× Well I will make a list for to about 5 important things so that is more easier for me to work memorize the things that I have to do.

✓ Well, I will make a list of about 5 important things so that it is easier for me to memorize the things that I have to do.

The phrase 'make a list for to about 5 important things' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'of' (make a list of). Also, 'more easier' is incorrect; 'easier' alone is sufficient. 'Work memorize' is incorrect; it should be just 'memorize'. Added 'it is' for grammatical correctness.