Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding repetition and making sentences more concise. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and correct minor grammar issues, such as article usage and plural forms.

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I can easily retain and recall important information. For instance, when I study for exams, I usually remember key facts and answers without difficulty.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be more natural by simplifying the sentence structure and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to make your answer flow better and be more specific about the examples.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things sometimes, such as my keys or small items at home. For example, I often can't remember where I put my keys.

提案: Your answer is a bit long and slightly unclear at the end. Try to make your topic sentence clear and support it with specific reasons. Avoid unnecessary phrases and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to take good care of my health because it affects not only me but also the people who depend on me. Staying healthy helps me perform my responsibilities well.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases and make your sentences concise.

例: I remember important things by writing them down in my notes or on my phone. This way, I can easily review the information whenever I need to.

× I could say that I am good at memorizing things because I could retain important information and recall it easily when it is needed.

✓ I can say that I am good at memorizing things because I can retain important information and recall it easily when it is needed.

The modal verb 'could' is used to express past ability or conditional situations, but here the speaker is talking about a present ability, so 'can' is more appropriate to express current capability.

× For example, in studying in preparation for exam, I usually recall easily the important facts or important or the answer.

✓ For example, when studying in preparation for an exam, I usually easily recall important facts or the answers.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and redundancy ('important or the answer'). Also, 'in studying in preparation for exam' is incorrect; it should be 'when studying in preparation for an exam'. The word order is improved for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, sometimes I've forgotten something important like my keys or small things in our house in which I could not recall where I placed them or put them.

✓ Yes, sometimes I've forgotten something important like my keys or small things in our house where I could not recall where I placed or put them.

The phrase 'in which' is awkward here; 'where' is more natural for referring to a place. Also, 'could not recall' is acceptable but 'couldn't recall' is more natural. The sentence is corrected for smoother flow and clarity.

× I need to remember in my daily life is to take good care of my health because I believe health is wealth and it is important for me to do all the things I need to do for myself and for the people who depend on me.

✓ What I need to remember in my daily life is to take good care of my health because I believe health is wealth and it is important for me to do all the things I need to do for myself and for the people who depend on me.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject for the verb 'is'. Adding 'What' at the beginning clarifies the subject and corrects the sentence structure.

× I remember important things by writing it down in my notes or in my phone so that I could retain easily or I could look back the important information whenever I need it.

✓ I remember important things by writing them down in my notes or in my phone so that I can easily retain or look back at the important information whenever I need it.

'Could' implies past or conditional ability, but the speaker is describing a habitual present action, so 'can' is more appropriate. Also, 'writing it down' should be 'writing them down' to agree with 'important things'. 'Look back the important information' should be 'look back at the important information' to use the correct preposition.