Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "I could say" and improve grammar by saying "I can retain information for a long time and retrieve it easily." Also, try to use linking words to make your answer smoother.

例: Yes, I am good at memorizing things because I can retain information for a long time and retrieve it easily when needed.

提案: Your answer is too short and lacks detail. Try to expand your response by giving a brief example or reason. Also, use correct tense such as "I have sometimes forgotten" to sound more natural.

例: Yes, I have sometimes forgotten important things, like appointments or deadlines, especially when I am very busy.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by making sentences clearer and more concise. Use linking words like "because" and "so" properly and avoid awkward phrasing such as "If ever this will be compromised."

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to take good care of my health because it is important. If my health is compromised, I won't be able to do what I need to do for myself and for the people who depend on me.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to finish your sentences and use correct expressions like "I write them down in my notes or phone so I can easily check them later." Also, give a clear example to support your answer.

例: I remember important things by writing them down in my notes or on my phone so I can easily check them later. For example, if someone gives me important instructions, I immediately record them to avoid forgetting.

× I could say that I am good at memorizing things because I believe I could retain information that for so long and retrieve it.

✓ I can say that I am good at memorizing things because I believe I can retain information for so long and retrieve it.

The modal verb 'could' is used incorrectly here to express ability in the present. 'Can' is the correct modal verb to express present ability. Also, 'that for so long' is incorrect; 'for so long' should directly follow 'retain information'. Suggestion: Use 'can' for present ability and place 'for so long' correctly.

× Yes, sometimes I forgot something important.

✓ Yes, sometimes I forget something important.

The question is about a general experience, so the present tense 'forget' is appropriate to express habitual action. Using past tense 'forgot' implies a single past event, which does not fit the question's intent. Suggestion: Use present tense 'forget' for habitual actions.

× I think I need to remember in my daily life, in taking good care of my health because I believe our health is important.

✓ I think I need to remember to take good care of my health in my daily life because I believe our health is important.

The phrase 'remember in my daily life, in taking good care' is awkward and incorrect. The correct structure is 'remember to take good care' to express the action that needs to be remembered. Also, 'in my daily life' should be placed appropriately. Suggestion: Use 'remember to' + verb to express remembering an action.

× If ever this will be compromised, we cannot do all the things that we need to do, not only for ourselves but for the people who depend.

✓ If this is ever compromised, we cannot do all the things that we need to do, not only for ourselves but for the people who depend on us.

The phrase 'If ever this will be compromised' is incorrect; 'If this is ever compromised' is correct for conditional statements. Also, 'people who depend' is incomplete; it should be 'people who depend on us' to clarify the object of dependence. Suggestion: Use correct conditional form and complete the pronoun phrase.

× I remember important things by taking down in my notes or in my phone so that I could record it easily whenever it is needed.

✓ I remember important things by writing them down in my notes or on my phone so that I can easily record them whenever needed.

The phrase 'taking down in my notes' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'writing them down in my notes'. Also, 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone'. The modal 'could' should be 'can' to express present ability. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to 'important things'. Suggestion: Use correct verb phrase 'write down', correct preposition 'on' for devices, and correct pronouns.

× For example, there is an important instruction given to me, I just immediately so that.

✓ For example, if there is an important instruction given to me, I act on it immediately.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb in the second clause. 'I just immediately so that' is not a complete or correct phrase. The correction provides a complete sentence with proper structure and meaning. Suggestion: Complete the sentence with a main verb and clarify the action.