Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "Personally speaking" and "I also think that's not on my good side." Instead, directly state your ability and give a specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I'm not very good at memorizing things. For instance, I often forget phone numbers shortly after hearing them because I don't repeat them to myself.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid awkward phrasing.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, I have lost three expensive earphones because I forgot to take them with me.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be more concise and natural. Avoid filler words like "Wow." Use linking words to connect ideas and clarify your reasons. Also, use more natural phrases like "carry with me" instead of "carried out with me."

例: There are several things I need to remember daily. For instance, I always make sure to carry my phone and iPod because I use them to study and research topics that help improve my grades.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer structure and grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then use linking words to list methods. Avoid awkward phrases like "hard evidence" and use more natural expressions.

例: There are several ways I remember important things. For example, I write them down as reminders, and I also repeat them to myself to make sure I don't forget.

× I vividly record that I forgot almost three different earphones that very expensive.

✓ I vividly recall that I forgot almost three different earphones that were very expensive.

The verb 'record' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb is 'recall' when referring to remembering something. Also, the sentence lacks the verb 'were' before 'very expensive' to complete the clause describing the earphones. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× This should be carried out with me so that I can use it to learn and research the things that can improve my academic grade.

✓ This should be carried with me so that I can use it to learn and research things that can improve my academic grades.

The phrase 'carried out with me' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'carried with me' to indicate possession. Also, 'academic grade' should be pluralized to 'academic grades' to reflect general improvement. These changes correct prepositional and pluralization errors.

× While there are still numerous ways to remember the necessary things, for example, I can write it down as a hard evidence so that I know what should I do, or I can keep telling myself so that I would know the things.

✓ There are numerous ways to remember necessary things; for example, I can write them down as hard evidence so that I know what I should do, or I can keep telling myself so that I remember them.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect word order ('what should I do'). 'Hard evidence' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. Also, 'the things' is vague; 'them' refers back to 'necessary things' more clearly. These corrections improve sentence clarity and grammatical accuracy.