Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of "I always expect in remembering," say "I always try to remember." Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I am good at memorizing important things, especially those related to my daily life, like birthdays, my schedule, and study plans.

提案: Your answer needs clearer sentence structure and more natural phrasing. Avoid repetition and use linking words to explain reasons. For example, say "Last month, I completely forgot my best friend's birthday because I was busy studying for exams."

例: Yes, I have. For instance, last month I forgot my best friend's birthday because I was very busy preparing for my exams.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating similar phrases. For example, "I mainly need to remember my daily tasks and class schedules because they help me stay organized."

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my routine tasks and class schedules since they help me stay organized and complete my work on time.

提案: Your answer has good content but could be clearer and more natural. Use linking words to explain your method. For example, "Although I usually have a good memory, I sometimes forget things, so I write important notes in my phone to review later."

例: Although I usually have a good memory, I sometimes forget important things, so I write them down in my phone's notes app to review when needed.

× I think I am good at memorizing things specially which are very crucial for my everyday life.

✓ I think I am good at memorizing things, especially those which are very crucial for my everyday life.

The word 'specially' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'especially' to indicate emphasis. Also, 'which' should refer to 'those' to clarify the things being described.

× I always expect in remembering or memorizing someone's birthday and my daily activities and my study plan.

✓ I always try to remember or memorize someone's birthday, my daily activities, and my study plan.

The phrase 'expect in remembering' is incorrect. The verb 'expect' does not take 'in' and is not appropriate here. 'Try to remember' is a better expression to convey the intended meaning.

× In the last month my best friend birthday was, which I've forgotten totally because I was in busy scheduled in that time of my examination, so I had forgotten it.

✓ Last month was my best friend's birthday, which I totally forgot because I was busy with my examination schedule at that time.

The phrase 'my best friend birthday' lacks possessive form; it should be 'my best friend's birthday'. Also, 'in busy scheduled' is incorrect; it should be 'busy with my examination schedule'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I was in busy scheduled in that time of my examination, so I had forgotten it.

✓ I was busy with my examination schedule at that time, so I had forgotten it.

The phrase 'in busy scheduled' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'busy with' followed by a noun. Also, 'in that time' should be 'at that time'.

× In my daily life, I need to remember mainly my routine work and sometimes my class schedules.

✓ In my daily life, I mainly need to remember my routine work and sometimes my class schedules.

The adverb 'mainly' is better placed before the verb 'need' to correctly modify the sentence.

× As a student, my class routine is very crucial for me to memorize so that I can attend them properly and do my work as my routine.

✓ As a student, my class routine is very crucial for me to memorize so that I can attend classes properly and do my work according to my routine.

The pronoun 'them' incorrectly refers to 'class routine' which is singular; it should refer to 'classes'. Also, 'do my work as my routine' is awkward; 'according to my routine' is clearer.

× Usually my brain is quite sharp to memorize important things, but sometimes we can be forgotten I guess.

✓ Usually my brain is quite sharp at memorizing important things, but sometimes I can forget, I guess.

The pronoun 'we' is incorrect here; the speaker should use 'I' to refer to themselves. Also, 'can be forgotten' is passive and incorrect; 'I can forget' is active and appropriate.

× Then I noted them in my phone notebook so that I can revise them when I need to do something.

✓ Then I note them in my phone's notebook so that I can review them when I need to do something.

The verb tense should be present simple 'note' to match habitual action. Also, 'phone notebook' should be possessive 'phone's notebook'. 'Revise' is more commonly used in British English for studying; 'review' is more general and appropriate here.