Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific examples. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I consider myself quite good at memorising things, especially important dates like birthdays and appointments. For instance, I always remember my friends' birthdays without needing reminders.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes a specific example, which is good. However, try to avoid repetition and improve sentence fluency by linking ideas more smoothly.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, two weeks ago, I forgot my passport when we were about to travel to Thailand, which caused a lot of stress.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains repetition and grammatical errors. Provide a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific details using linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: In daily life, it's essential to stay organised and manage time effectively. For example, every morning I write a to-do list to plan my day, which helps me stay focused and productive.

提案: Your answer has good content but is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas and complete your sentences for clarity.

例: I usually remember important things by writing notes. For instance, I write down my father's birthday because no one else in my family remembers it, so I remind them every year.

× I think I'm good at memorizing things I always remember.

✓ I think I'm good at memorizing things; I always remember them.

The original sentence lacks a conjunction or punctuation to separate two independent clauses, causing confusion. Adding a semicolon and the pronoun 'them' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Some small things like my, the birthdays and some small things in.

✓ Some small things like my birthday and other small things.

The phrase 'my, the birthdays and some small things in' is unclear and incorrectly uses articles and prepositions. 'My birthday' is singular and does not need 'the'. The phrase 'some small things in' is incomplete and should be omitted or completed. The correction simplifies and clarifies the meaning.

× Sometimes I I have forgotten some important things.

✓ Sometimes I have forgotten some important things.

The repetition of 'I' is a typographical error. The use of present perfect tense 'have forgotten' is appropriate here to indicate past experiences relevant to the present.

× For example, two weeks ago when we were going to Thailand, I forgot my passport.

✓ For example, two weeks ago when we went to Thailand, I forgot my passport.

The phrase 'were going to Thailand' suggests an ongoing action in the past, but the event is completed. Using simple past 'went' is more appropriate to indicate a completed action in the past.

× In a daily life, it's important to be organized and manage your time.

✓ In daily life, it's important to be organised and manage your time.

The phrase 'in a daily life' incorrectly uses the indefinite article 'a'. 'Daily life' is an uncountable noun phrase and does not require an article. Also, 'organised' is the British English spelling.

× For example, for me, when I woke up, I I write my I write the things that I will do in my day.

✓ For example, for me, when I wake up, I write the things that I will do in my day.

The sentence mixes past tense 'woke up' with present tense 'write'. Since the action is habitual, present tense 'wake up' is appropriate. Also, the repetition of 'I' and 'write' is a typographical error and should be removed.

× For example, my father's birthday, I wrote it then.

✓ For example, my father's birthday; I wrote it down then.

The sentence is missing a conjunction or punctuation to separate clauses. Adding a semicolon improves clarity. Also, 'wrote it' is correct past tense, but adding 'down' clarifies that a note was made.

× Nobody from my family remember that day, but I remind them.

✓ Nobody from my family remembers that day, but I remind them.

The subject 'Nobody' is singular, so the verb should be 'remembers' to agree in number (subject-verb agreement). The verb 'remind' in present tense is appropriate here.