Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng cần chú ý sử dụng thì cho phù hợp và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Ví dụ, bạn nên dùng thì quá khứ hoàn thành hoặc quá khứ đơn cho các sự kiện trong quá khứ và chú ý đến sự thống nhất thì trong câu. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể ngắn gọn hơn và tự nhiên hơn bằng cách tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ nối hợp lý.

例: I wasn't very good at memorizing things when I was a child because I found it hard to retain information. For instance, I often forgot important details in subjects like math and history, which affected my grades. However, recently I have been practicing various memory techniques to improve.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không chính xác hoặc không tự nhiên như "got me some problems" và "umm" trong câu trả lời. Hãy sử dụng các từ vựng phù hợp và câu trúc rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before, especially during my childhood. For example, I often forgot to submit my homework on time, which caused problems at school. However, I have recently improved my memory by using reminders and a To-Do List.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp như "your full skills", "luxurious foods", và cấu trúc câu chưa rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn và cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như số nhiều, chia động từ.

例: Nowadays, it is important to remember daily tasks to manage life efficiently. For example, maintaining a healthy lifestyle by eating nutritious foods and avoiding too much fried food can improve cognitive function. Also, using a planner or To-Do List helps me stay organized and complete tasks on time, which reduces stress.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý đến số nhiều và chia động từ đúng trong câu, ví dụ "memory techniques" thay vì "memory technique" và "help me" thay vì "have me". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ để tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: From my perspective, I use memory techniques such as repetition and creating tutorials. For example, I write down important tasks to make sure I don't forget anything. These methods help me stay organized and remember important things efficiently.

× I often forgot important details in subjects like math and history, which negatively affect my academic performance.

✓ I often forgot important details in subjects like math and history, which negatively affected my academic performance.

The verb 'affect' should be in the past tense 'affected' to agree with the past tense context of the sentence.

× However, recently I have improved my memory by using reminder and umm To Do List.

✓ However, recently I have improved my memory by using reminders and a To Do List.

The noun 'reminder' should be plural 'reminders' to indicate multiple reminders, and 'To Do List' should be preceded by the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× Nowaday, it is important to remember your full skills to manage daily life efficiently.

✓ Nowadays, it is important to remember your full skills to manage daily life efficiently.

The word 'Nowaday' is incorrect; the correct form is 'Nowadays' to indicate the present time.

× For example, maintain a healthy lifestyle by eating luxurious foods and avoid too much fried food can improve your cognitive function.

✓ For example, maintaining a healthy lifestyle by eating nutritious foods and avoiding too much fried food can improve your cognitive function.

The word 'luxurious' is incorrect in this context; 'nutritious' is appropriate to describe healthy foods. Also, the sentence structure requires gerunds 'maintaining' and 'avoiding' to function as subjects.

× In addition, using a planning or To Do List have you stay organized and complete tasks on time, which reduce stress.

✓ In addition, using a planner or To Do List helps you stay organized and complete tasks on time, which reduces stress.

The subject 'using a planner or To Do List' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' instead of 'have', and 'which reduces stress' requires singular verb 'reduces' to agree with singular subject.

× From my perspective, I use memory technique, repetition and make a tutorial.

✓ From my perspective, I use memory techniques, repetition, and make a tutorial.

The noun 'technique' should be plural 'techniques' to indicate multiple methods.

× These methods have me stay organized and remember important thing efficiently.

✓ These methods help me stay organized and remember important things efficiently.

The verb 'have' is incorrect here; 'help' is appropriate. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' to match the context.