Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, keep your answer concise and clear.

例: Yes, I have a strong memory and can easily remember important information when needed.

提案: Your answer is unclear and a bit confusing. Try to respond directly and clearly to the question. Use simple and correct sentences to express your ideas.

例: No, I have never forgotten anything important so far.

提案: Your answer is vague and lacks coherence. Try to give a direct answer about yourself and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Provide specific examples related to your daily life.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember important appointments, deadlines at work, and to take my medication on time if I am sick.

提案: Your answer is mostly clear but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Avoid redundancy and try to explain your method more specifically.

例: When I need to remember something important, I usually repeat it silently in my mind a few times, which helps me retain the information easily.

× Yes, actually my memory is so strong, I have marvelous memorizing.

✓ Yes, actually my memory is so strong, I have marvelous memory.

The word 'memorizing' is a verb in the -ing form and cannot be used as a noun here. The correct noun form is 'memory'. Using 'memory' correctly refers to the ability to remember things.

× My mind is always ready for remember everything.

✓ My mind is always ready to remember everything.

After the phrase 'ready for', the verb should be in the infinitive form 'to remember' rather than the base form 'remember'. The correct expression is 'ready to remember'.

× Actually, I don't remember any story that I have forgotten.

✓ Actually, I don't remember any time that I have forgotten something.

The phrase 'any story that I have forgotten' is awkward because 'story' is not the correct noun here. It is better to say 'any time that I have forgotten something' to express forgetting events or instances.

× That depends the person.

✓ That depends on the person.

The verb 'depend' requires the preposition 'on' to connect to its object. The correct phrase is 'depends on the person'.

× The individual whose life contains work.

✓ The individual whose life involves work.

The verb 'contains' is not appropriate for 'life' in this context. 'Involves' is a better verb to express that work is part of someone's life.

× Maybe they need to remember their wake up time or something like this.

✓ Maybe they need to remember their wake-up time or something like that.

The phrase 'something like this' is less natural here; 'something like that' is the correct idiomatic expression. Also, 'wake up time' should be hyphenated as 'wake-up time' when used as a noun.

× Or who is sick to take their medicine on time.

✓ Or those who are sick need to take their medicine on time.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject. Adding 'those' and 'need to' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I don't have any specific way to remember something when somebody says something crucial, just I repeat it once in my mind and I know it exactly.

✓ I don't have any specific way to remember something when somebody says something crucial; I just repeat it once in my mind and then I know it exactly.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions. Adding a semicolon and 'just' in the correct position improves clarity and sentence flow.

× It's piece of cake for me.

✓ It's a piece of cake for me.

The phrase 'piece of cake' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it. Omitting the article is grammatically incorrect.