Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có phần lặp lại, bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn và tránh dùng những câu không hoàn chỉnh. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'memorizing Academy subjects' nên là 'memorizing academic subjects'.

例: I'm quite good at memorizing academic subjects like history and English vocabulary because I use repetition and take notes. However, I often forget small details in everyday life.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự liên kết giữa các câu và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như câu 'Which I had left in the car trunk' không rõ nghĩa và câu cuối cùng không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng các từ nối để câu chuyện mạch lạc và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I once forgot my motorbike key in the pocket of my jacket, which I had left in the car trunk. As a result, I couldn't drive home and had to call my mom to bring the key to me.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'So is kind of' không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I need to remember important things like passwords for my bank accounts and websites because they protect my personal information. Therefore, I always try to keep them safe and secure.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ 'Are usually dropped out' và 'use the reputation method' không đúng. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, chính xác và từ vựng phù hợp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và dễ hiểu hơn.

例: I usually write important things on my phone's note app or on paper. I also use sticky notes and put them in visible places so I can see them easily and remember.

× Well, I'm not sure, but I think that I'm quite good at memorizing Academy subjects such as history or English vocabulary because I tend to use repetition or notes, but in everyday life I tend to forget every small details about the world around me, which is quite.

✓ Well, I'm not sure, but I think that I'm quite good at memorizing academic subjects such as history or English vocabulary because I tend to use repetition or notes, but in everyday life I tend to forget every small detail about the world around me, which is quite.

The word 'Academy' should be 'academic' as an adjective describing subjects. Also, 'details' should be singular 'detail' because 'every' requires a singular noun. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1) and adjective usage (ID 13). However, per instructions, only correct mistakes that meet the grammar problem type list. 'Every small details' is a singular/plural issue (ID 1).

× Well, I'm not sure, but I think that I'm quite good at memorizing Academy subjects such as history or English vocabulary because I tend to use repetition or notes, but in everyday life I tend to forget every small details about the world around me, which is quite.

✓ Well, I'm not sure, but I think that I'm quite good at memorizing academic subjects such as history or English vocabulary because I tend to use repetition or notes, but in everyday life I tend to forget every small detail about the world around me, which is quite.

The phrase 'every small details' is incorrect because 'every' requires a singular noun. The correct form is 'every small detail'. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1).

× Oh yes, definitely. I remember one time when I parked my motorbike at school, I accidentally let my key into the small pocket of my jacket. Which I had left in the car trunk and then I had no key to drive my motorbike back to home, so I had to call my mom to get me to bring me the speech.

✓ Oh yes, definitely. I remember one time when I parked my motorbike at school, I accidentally left my key in the small pocket of my jacket, which I had left in the car trunk. Then I had no key to drive my motorbike back home, so I had to call my mom to bring me the spare key.

The sentence 'Which I had left in the car trunk' is a fragment and should be connected to the previous sentence. 'Let my key into the small pocket' is incorrect; it should be 'left my key in the small pocket'. 'Back to home' should be 'back home'. 'Bring me the speech' is incorrect; it should be 'bring me the spare key'. These are sentence structure errors (ID 26) and verb usage errors (ID 5).

× Oh yes, definitely. I remember one time when I parked my motorbike at school, I accidentally let my key into the small pocket of my jacket. Which I had left in the car trunk and then I had no key to drive my motorbike back to home, so I had to call my mom to get me to bring me the speech.

✓ Oh yes, definitely. I remember one time when I parked my motorbike at school, I accidentally left my key in the small pocket of my jacket, which I had left in the car trunk. Then I had no key to drive my motorbike back home, so I had to call my mom to bring me the spare key.

The preposition 'into' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to something inside a pocket. Also, 'back to home' should be 'back home'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11).

× Oh yes, definitely. I remember one time when I parked my motorbike at school, I accidentally let my key into the small pocket of my jacket. Which I had left in the car trunk and then I had no key to drive my motorbike back to home, so I had to call my mom to get me to bring me the speech.

✓ Oh yes, definitely. I remember one time when I parked my motorbike at school, I accidentally left my key in the small pocket of my jacket, which I had left in the car trunk. Then I had no key to drive my motorbike back home, so I had to call my mom to bring me the spare key.

The phrase 'get me to bring me the speech' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'bring me the spare key'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12).

× Well, I think one of the most important things that I need to remember is my passwords such as those bank accounts in various websites. That is because like they, I have to protect my personal information in privacy. So is kind of. So I try to keep them safe and secure for future use.

✓ Well, I think one of the most important things that I need to remember is my passwords for bank accounts on various websites. That is because I have to protect my personal information and privacy. So, I try to keep them safe and secure for future use.

The sentence 'such as those bank accounts in various websites' is awkward; 'passwords for bank accounts on various websites' is better. 'That is because like they' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'That is because I have to protect my personal information and privacy.' 'So is kind of' is incomplete and unclear and should be removed. These are sentence structure errors (ID 26) and incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12).

× Are usually dropped out important things on my note app on phone or write it down on the paper so I can like use the reputation method to remember it easily. Also I can like either sticky note to stick it on the world to like so I can easily look at it whenever.

✓ I usually write down important things on my note app on my phone or on paper so I can use the repetition method to remember them easily. Also, I can use sticky notes to stick them on the wall so I can easily look at them whenever I want.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains many errors: 'Are usually dropped out' is incorrect; it should be 'I usually write down'. 'Reputation method' should be 'repetition method'. 'Either sticky note to stick it on the world' is incorrect; it should be 'use sticky notes to stick them on the wall'. These are sentence structure errors (ID 26) and incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12).