Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. "great good" 같은 중복 표현을 피하고, 문장을 명확하게 마무리해야 합니다. 또한, 문장이 다소 길고 중복된 부분이 있어 간결하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I was good at memorizing things when I was younger, but now I find it harder to remember details. However, I still remember important appointments with my close friends, which helps me stay organized.

提案: 답변이 단절되고 문장이 완성되지 않아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적으로 답변을 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I often forget important events like appointments and anniversaries because I have a lot on my plate these days.

提案: 답변에 불필요한 중단과 반복이 있습니다. 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하고, 불필요한 감탄사나 중단을 줄여 명확하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my best friend's birthday, so I usually set an alarm or reminder on my phone to avoid forgetting this special occasion.

提案: 답변에 문법 오류와 중복 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하고, 불필요한 단어를 제거하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I usually set alerts and reminders on my phone to remember important tasks. Also, I make a to-do list and keep my workspace tidy to stay organized.

× I used to be great good at memorizing things when I was younger, but now I find it harder to remember details.

✓ I used to be great at memorizing things when I was younger, but now I find it harder to remember details.

The phrase 'great good' is redundant and incorrect. Only one adjective should be used here. 'Great' alone correctly describes the ability, so 'good' should be removed.

× This helps me stay organized and stay.

✓ This helps me stay organized and focused.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and stay' which is incomplete. It needs a complement after 'stay' to complete the meaning. Adding 'focused' or a similar word completes the sentence logically.

× Yes, unfortunately I often forget significant events. Like. First, they are. The appointments and anniversary of. Special events. Uhm. Because I have a lot on my plate. These days.

✓ Yes, unfortunately I often forget significant events, like appointments and anniversaries of special events because I have a lot on my plate these days.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper connection. Combining them into a single coherent sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In my daily life I need to remember my best friends birthday so I usually set an alarm or reminder on my.

✓ In my daily life I need to remember my best friend's birthday so I usually set an alarm or reminder on my phone.

'Best friends birthday' should be 'best friend's birthday' to indicate possession for a singular friend. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed 'phone' to complete the thought.

× I usually set of alerts and reminders on my wife's phone because it helps me to remember important things or significant tasks.

✓ I usually set alerts and reminders on my wife's phone because it helps me remember important things or significant tasks.

The phrase 'set of alerts' is incorrect; it should be 'set alerts'. Also, 'helps me to remember' can be simplified to 'helps me remember' for natural English.

× So I try to make up make To Do List and make a workplace tidy. Anne.

✓ So I try to make up a To-Do List and keep my workplace tidy.

The original sentence has repeated words 'make up make' and lacks articles. 'Make up a To-Do List' is correct, and 'keep my workplace tidy' is a better phrase. 'Anne' seems out of place and is removed.