Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and fragmented. Try to form complete sentences and avoid pauses. Also, provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I am a doctor. I have to learn a lot about the human body, so having a good memory is necessary for my job.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to use complete sentences and linking words to explain your experience clearly. Avoid redundancy and focus on specific examples.

例: Yes, sometimes I have forgotten important things. For example, when I visit my patients, I may forget to give them some information, which can be very problematic.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, use correct vocabulary related to your profession.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember how many patients I have to visit each day and which medicines I have given to each patient for their treatment.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Use full sentences and explain your method clearly with linking words. Avoid repetition and be specific about your techniques.

例: First of all, I take a notebook and write down important things. Then, I also note the time because it helps me remember which tasks are urgent.

× I have to learn lot of things about human body, so it's necessary to. Good memorizing.

✓ I have to learn a lot of things about the human body, so it's necessary to memorize well.

The sentence uses incorrect verb form 'Good memorizing' which is not grammatically correct. Instead, 'to memorize well' is the correct infinitive form to express the necessity. Also, 'lot of things' needs an article 'a' and 'human body' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Yeah, yes, actually sometimes I forgotten something important.

✓ Yeah, yes, actually sometimes I have forgotten something important.

The verb 'forgotten' is a past participle and needs an auxiliary verb 'have' to form the present perfect tense. Without 'have', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× I usually when I go to see how my patient sometimes as give a her and informed her information about them are an it's very. Bing.

✓ Usually, when I go to see my patient, I sometimes give her information about them, and it's very important.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It lacks proper sentence structure and connectors. The correction rearranges the sentence to make it coherent and grammatically correct.

× I need to remember in my life how many patients. To visit India in a day and I have to remember who which drags I give the patient.

✓ I need to remember in my life how many patients visit India in a day, and I have to remember which drugs I give the patients.

'Patients' is plural, so the verb should be 'visit' not 'visits'. 'Drags' is a misspelling of 'drugs'. Also, 'patient' should be plural 'patients' to match the context.

× In for for their treatment purpose.

✓ For their treatment purpose.

The phrase 'In for for' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'for' to indicate purpose.

× First of all, I take a bad for. The writing, the important things in this and then I also ride the. Time which work is very important.

✓ First of all, I take a pad for writing the important things, and then I also write the time which work is very important.

The sentence is fragmented and contains spelling errors ('bad' instead of 'pad', 'ride' instead of 'write'). The correction fixes these errors and improves sentence flow.