Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to form complete sentences and avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect your thoughts logically.

例: Honestly, I have a poor memory, so whenever I try to memorize something, I tend to forget it easily. Therefore, I need to review the information repeatedly every day to remember it well.

提案: Your response is fragmented and lacks coherence. Use complete sentences and linking words like 'so' or 'because' to explain reasons clearly. Also, avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily to make your answer more effective.

例: Yes, I often forget important things, so I make a to-do list every morning to stay organized and remember my tasks throughout the day.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many short, incomplete sentences. Try to combine your ideas into full sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain your points. Also, check your vocabulary for accuracy (e.g., 'focus' instead of 'be focus').

例: In my daily life, the most important thing I need to remember is to stay focused on myself and my tasks because this helps me complete my work properly.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and lacks fluency. Use complete sentences and linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to explain your method clearly. Avoid unnecessary pauses and ensure your vocabulary fits the context.

例: When I forget important things, especially tests at work, I look at my to-do list so that I can remember the tasks I need to complete.

× I have bad memory lost Whenever I memorize something I tend to.

✓ I have a bad memory loss whenever I memorize something I tend to.

The phrase 'bad memory lost' is incorrect because 'memory' is a singular noun and needs an article 'a' before it, and 'lost' should be 'loss' as a noun. The correct phrase is 'a bad memory loss'.

× I have bad memory lost Whenever I memorize something I tend to.

✓ I have a bad memory loss. Whenever I memorize something, I tend to forget it easily.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks clarity. It should be split into two sentences with proper punctuation and completion of the thought for clarity.

× Easily forget it, that's why.

✓ I easily forget it; that's why.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks a subject. Adding 'I' and connecting the clauses properly improves sentence structure.

× Whenever I need to study and memorize something, I need to recall and recall it.

✓ Whenever I need to study and memorize something, I need to recall it repeatedly.

Repeating 'recall' twice is redundant. Using 'recall it repeatedly' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Every day for me too, in order for me to memorize it.

✓ I do this every day in order to memorize it.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. Rephrasing it into a complete sentence improves clarity.

× I need to make list.

✓ I need to make a list.

The noun 'list' is countable and requires an article 'a' before it.

× And the first thing in the morning.

✓ I make the list first thing in the morning.

The original sentence is a fragment. It needs a subject and verb to form a complete sentence.

× In order for me to be organized and remember the things that I need to do. And in every day.

✓ In order for me to be organized and remember the things I need to do every day.

The phrase 'And in every day' is incorrect and redundant. 'Every day' should be placed properly within the sentence.

× The most important thing that I need to remember in my daily life is to be focus.

✓ The most important thing that I need to remember in my daily life is to be focused.

The adjective 'focus' is incorrect here; the correct form is 'focused' to describe a state of concentration.

× On myself. Only.

✓ On myself only.

Splitting the phrase into two fragments is incorrect. It should be combined into one phrase without a period.

× And as well as my test.

✓ As well as my test.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and the phrase is incomplete. Removing 'And' and connecting it properly improves the sentence.

× In order for me to finish. My job properly.

✓ In order for me to finish my job properly.

The sentence is fragmented and should be combined into one complete sentence.

× I need to stay focus and rim.

✓ I need to stay focused and firm.

'Focus' should be 'focused' as an adjective. 'Rim' is likely a typo and should be 'firm' to make sense in context.

× Sometimes when I forgot some things.

✓ Sometimes when I forget some things.

The sentence refers to a habitual action, so present tense 'forget' is appropriate instead of past tense 'forgot'.

× Most probably some test.

✓ Most probably some tests.

The phrase is incomplete and 'test' should be plural to match 'some'. It should be part of a complete sentence.

× In my work.

✓ At my work.

The preposition 'at' is more appropriate when referring to a workplace location.

× I just looked at my. To Do List in order for me to remember that.

✓ I just look at my To Do List in order to remember those things.

The sentence is fragmented and inconsistent in tense. 'Looked' should be 'look' for habitual action, and the sentence should be complete without unnecessary periods.

× The things that I need to do.

✓ The things I need to do.

The relative pronoun 'that' is optional here and can be omitted for smoother sentence flow.