Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 많으며, 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 문법적 정확성을 높여야 합니다. 또한, 구체적인 예시를 들어 답변을 풍부하게 만드는 것이 좋습니다.

例: I'm not very good at memorizing things, especially when I have to learn a lot in a short time. For example, before exams, I often struggle to remember all the material quickly.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 끊어져 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 상황 설명을 포함하여 자연스럽고 논리적으로 답변을 구성해야 합니다.

例: Yes, I often forget my passwords for different accounts. For instance, I sometimes have to reset them because I can't remember them.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 다소 부정확하고 문장이 단편적입니다. 주제 문장을 명확히 하고, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어가며 구체적인 예시를 추가하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my schedule, especially appointments. For example, I always make sure to remember the exact time and place when I have meetings with friends or colleagues.

提案: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 문법적 오류가 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 방법을 설명하며, 문장을 완성도 있게 구성해야 합니다.

例: I usually try to write important things down in my diary. However, I found it difficult to find information quickly, so now I use my phone's reminder app to remember important tasks.

× I feel difficulty when I have to memorizing something in very short time.

✓ I feel difficulty when I have to memorize something in a very short time.

The verb 'memorizing' is incorrectly used after 'have to'. After 'have to', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'memorize' is correct here.

× I takes hard time when I have to take a nice exam every time.

✓ I take a hard time when I have to take a nice exam every time.

The subject 'I' requires the verb in base form 'take' without 's'. 'Takes' is used with third person singular subjects.

× I often. Forgot my password so I need to find again and again.

✓ I often forget my password so I need to find it again and again.

The verb 'forgot' is past tense but the sentence describes a habitual action, so present tense 'forget' is appropriate. Also, 'it' is needed to refer to the password.

× The most important things I need to remember is my schedule.

✓ The most important thing I need to remember is my schedule.

'Things' is plural but the verb 'is' is singular. To match, 'thing' should be singular.

× Especially appointment with someone I need to memorize. The exact place an time. With when I have to meet someone.

✓ Especially appointments with someone I need to memorize: the exact place and time when I have to meet someone.

Prepositions and articles are incorrectly used. 'Appointment' should be plural 'appointments' to match context, and 'an' should be 'and'. Also, 'with when' is incorrect; 'when' alone suffices.

× Air ones I tried to write wrote down. In my. Diary.

✓ At times I tried to write down in my diary.

'Air ones' is incorrect; likely intended 'At times'. Also, 'write wrote' is redundant; only 'write' or 'wrote' is needed depending on tense. Here, 'tried to write down' is correct.

× But. I think it's not a good idea because I need to find in the information, so I improve my way of remembering to write down on.

✓ But I think it's not a good idea because I need to find the information, so I improved my way of remembering by writing it down.

Sentence fragments and incorrect prepositions are present. 'Find in the information' should be 'find the information'. 'Improve' should be past tense 'improved' to match context. 'To write down on' is incorrect; 'by writing it down' is correct.