Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific examples. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, I still clearly remember my childhood memories, such as my first day at kindergarten and receiving my first school uniform. These memories have stayed with me over the years.

提案: Focus on giving a clear and concise answer. Use correct grammar and sentence structure. Explain the situation logically and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, I once forgot my speech during an urgent meeting with clients because I had been working late the night before and overslept. As a result, I missed the scheduled meeting.

提案: Try to organize your answer with clear points and use linking words like 'for example' and 'additionally'. Pay attention to grammar and word choice to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to stay organized and manage my time effectively. For example, I keep a to-do list to help me complete tasks and avoid forgetting important responsibilities. Additionally, I focus on maintaining a healthy lifestyle by eating well and getting enough sleep.

提案: Make your answer clearer by using correct grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your methods.

例: To remember important things, I usually write them down in a diary or a notebook. Sometimes, I also set alarms or reminders on my phone to make sure I don't forget any tasks.

× Yeah, I'll be see remember things easily and.

✓ Yeah, I'll be able to remember things easily.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'see remember' which is not a valid verb form. The correct expression is 'be able to remember' to indicate capability in the future tense.

× I still remember my childhood memory when I was in a kindergartens and ice when I got my first school dresses, dresses and my professional journey.

✓ I still remember my childhood memories when I was in kindergarten and when I got my first school dress and my professional journey.

'Kindergartens' should be singular 'kindergarten' as it refers to a general period or place. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' to match the context. 'Dresses' should be singular 'dress' if referring to the first school dress.

× I still remembered those days.

✓ I still remember those days.

The present perfect or simple present 'remember' is more appropriate here to express ongoing recollection rather than a completed action in the past.

× You how many times I forgot so many things, last times I forget it my speech in an urgent meeting with my clients, because due to the very heavy duty should rules, I work late night and forgotten to wake up early in the morning, so I forward this meeting important schedule.

✓ You know how many times I forgot so many things. Last time, I forgot my speech in an urgent meeting with my clients because, due to very heavy duty schedules, I worked late at night and forgot to wake up early in the morning, so I missed this important meeting.

Multiple tense errors: 'forget' should be 'forgot' for past tense; 'work' should be 'worked'; 'forgotten' should be 'forgot'. Also, sentence structure and word choice were corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× because due to the very heavy duty should rules, I work late night and forgotten to wake up early in the morning, so I forward this meeting important schedule.

✓ because of the very heavy duty schedules, I worked late at night and forgot to wake up early in the morning, so I missed this important meeting.

The phrase 'because due to' is redundant; 'because of' is correct. 'Should rules' is unclear and corrected to 'schedules'. 'Late night' should be 'late at night'. 'Forward this meeting important schedule' is incorrect and corrected to 'missed this important meeting'.

× Yeah, in my daily life it is important to stay organize, manage effectively, for example to keep do list to help Maine retries task and avoid forgetting important responsibility.

✓ Yeah, in my daily life it is important to stay organized and manage effectively; for example, to keep a to-do list to help me retry tasks and avoid forgetting important responsibilities.

'Stay organize' should be 'stay organized' (adjective). 'Do list' should be 'to-do list'. 'Maine retries task' is unclear and corrected to 'help me retry tasks'. 'Responsibility' should be plural 'responsibilities'.

× Additionally, maintaining a healthy lifestyle to eating well, getting enough sleep is crucial for overall being.

✓ Additionally, maintaining a healthy lifestyle by eating well and getting enough sleep is crucial for overall well-being.

'To eating' is incorrect; it should be 'by eating'. 'Overall being' is incorrect; the correct term is 'overall well-being'.

× Remembering my important thing I always write down or dairy or write down some daily tasks which is very which is very important.

✓ To remember important things, I always write them down in a diary or write down some daily tasks which are very important.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Corrected for clarity and proper sentence structure, including subject-verb agreement ('tasks which are').

× Or sometime I put some alarm or reminder on my phone to memorize all this thing.

✓ Sometimes I put alarms or reminders on my phone to remember all these things.

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'Alarm' and 'reminder' should be plural to match 'all these things'. 'Memorize' is incorrectly used; 'remember' is more appropriate here. 'This thing' should be 'these things' to match plural context.