Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了基本意思，但语法和用词不够准确，句子结构较为混乱，且缺少连贯的连接词。建议加强语法练习，使用更自然的表达方式，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I am good at memorising things for a short time, usually less than an hour. However, after that, I find it difficult to remember details. For example, I often forget where I put my cell phone or the tasks I need to do next.

提案: 回答中信息表达不够清晰，语法错误较多，且缺少逻辑连贯性。建议简化句子结构，明确表达事件的时间和细节，并使用连接词使内容更连贯。

例: Yes, I have. For example, I reserved a task on May 24th, but I forgot to submit my residence card in Japan. Because of this, I had to change the date to today.

提案: 回答内容较丰富，但句子较长且缺少适当的连接词，表达不够流畅。建议使用连接词分隔句子，使表达更自然，同时注意单复数和介词的正确使用。

例: I always need to remember where I put my cell phone because sometimes I leave it on my desk and then can't find it after a few minutes. Also, I need to remember important things, so I usually write them down to avoid forgetting.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，例子部分不完整。建议使用更准确的句子结构，补充完整的例子，并使用连接词使内容连贯。

例: I always carry a notebook with me and write down important things. For example, I note down when I have tests or deadlines for submitting papers.

× I am a person who is good at memory something in a short time like no more than one hour's.

✓ I am a person who is good at memorising something in a short time, like no more than one hour.

这里'memory something'用法错误，应该用动名词'memorising'表示记忆动作。'one hour's'缺少名词，应该直接说'one hour'。

× Like for example where I put my cell phones were things I should do next.

✓ For example, remembering where I put my cell phone and the things I should do next.

'cell phones'应为单数形式，因为通常指一个手机。句子结构混乱，需调整使表达更清晰。

× Actually I reserved the elves task on 24th of May but I forgot to submit my residence card in in Japan's resident card so I have to change the date to today.

✓ Actually, I reserved the elves task on the 24th of May, but I forgot to submit my residence card in Japan, so I had to change the date to today.

时态不一致，前半句用过去时'reserved'，后半句应保持过去时态，'have to'应改为过去时'had to'。

× I always need to remember where I put my cell phone on because sometimes I just put it like on my desks but after like 10 minutes it's just hard for me to find where my cell phones are and also I need to remember some important things and to avoid I forgot I usually write it down.

✓ I always need to remember where I put my cell phone because sometimes I just put it on my desk, but after about 10 minutes it's hard for me to find where my cell phone is. Also, I need to remember some important things, and to avoid forgetting, I usually write them down.

'desks'应为单数'desk'，因为指的是自己的桌子。'cell phones'应为单数形式。'to avoid I forgot'表达错误，应为'to avoid forgetting'。

× I always have a notebook, I take it everywhere and I always write down like a lot of important things on that kind of notebook.

✓ I always have a notebook; I take it everywhere and always write down a lot of important things in it.

句子连接不当，使用分号或分句更合适。'like a lot of'表达不准确，直接用'a lot of'即可。'on that kind of notebook'应改为'in it'更自然。

× For example, would not have tests and when I need to submit my papers.

✓ For example, when I have tests or need to submit my papers.

句子不完整，缺少主语和谓语，需补充完整表达。