Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 더 명확하고 간결하게 만들고, 연결어를 사용하여 내용을 논리적으로 연결하세요. 예를 들어, 'I am good at memorizing important dates like my friends' or parents' birthdays, but I find it difficult to remember academic subjects such as biology or chemistry.'

例: I am good at memorizing important dates, such as my friends' and parents' birthdays. However, I find it challenging to remember detailed information from subjects like biology or chemistry.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 상황을 구체적으로 설명하며, 연결어를 사용해 보세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I once forgot to submit an important assignment, but my friend reminded me, so I was able to submit it on time.'

例: Yes, I once forgot to submit an important assignment. Fortunately, my friend reminded me about it, so I was able to submit it on time.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 일상에서 기억해야 할 것들을 구체적으로 설명하고, 문장을 간결하게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'I need a diary to write down important tasks and appointments because it helps me remember them better.'

例: I need a diary to write down important tasks and appointments because it helps me remember them better.

提案: 답변이 간결하지만 문법적으로 더 자연스럽게 표현할 수 있습니다. 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 확장하고 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어, 'I usually use a memo application on my smartphone to remember important things because it is convenient and easy to access.'

例: I usually use a memo application on my smartphone to remember important things because it is convenient and easy to access.

× It depends on situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'situation'. In English, when referring to a specific situation, 'the' is required. So, 'on situation' should be corrected to 'on the situation'.

× My friend or my parents birthday but I'm not good at memorizing the subject like biology or chemistry.

✓ My friend's or my parents' birthdays, but I'm not good at memorizing subjects like biology or chemistry.

The phrase 'My friend or my parents birthday' has singular/plural inconsistency and missing possessive forms. It should be 'My friend's or my parents' birthdays' to show possession and correct plural form. Also, 'the subject' should be plural 'subjects' because biology and chemistry are multiple subjects.

× I forgot to unload my important assignment but my friend.

✓ I forgot to submit my important assignment, but my friend reminded me.

The sentence is unclear and incomplete. 'Unload' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'submit'. Also, 'but my friend' is incomplete; it should be 'but my friend reminded me' or similar to complete the thought.

× Talk me about it so I finally. Memorized them.

✓ My friend talked to me about it, so I finally memorized it.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrect. 'Talk me about it' should be 'My friend talked to me about it'. Also, 'memorized them' is unclear; it should be 'memorized it' referring to the assignment. The sentence should be combined properly.

× I need a diary that I can write on because without diary I can remember and when I use diary I can write everything.

✓ I need a diary that I can write on because without a diary I cannot remember, and when I use a diary, I can write everything.

The noun 'diary' requires the indefinite article 'a' when mentioned for the first time or in general. Also, the sentence is missing 'cannot' to express inability. Articles are necessary for clarity.

× Which is? Which are important?

✓ Which things are important?

The sentences 'Which is? Which are important?' are incomplete and unclear. They should be combined into a clear question like 'Which things are important?'. This improves sentence structure and clarity.

× I usually use memo. Application in my smartphone to remember important things.

✓ I usually use a memo application on my smartphone to remember important things.

The phrase 'memo. Application' is incorrectly split and missing articles. It should be 'a memo application'. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to smartphone apps.