Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多いです。過去の経験を話す際は時制を統一し、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。また、冗長な表現を避け、明確な主題文を使いましょう。

例: Yes, I was good at memorising things when I was in high school because I had to prepare for the entrance exam. I tried various methods and eventually found the best way that worked for me.

提案: 内容が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。具体的なエピソードを簡潔に述べ、文の構造を整えることが必要です。

例: Yes, once I forgot to write my name on an English test in high school, so I got a zero score. It was a very difficult experience for me.

提案: 回答が意味不明で文法的にも誤りが多いです。質問に直接答え、日常生活で覚えておくべきことを具体的に述べる練習が必要です。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to be grateful to the people who prepare my food and help me, especially because many foreigners work hard in these jobs.

提案: 文法の誤りが目立ちますが、内容は理解できます。繰り返しの重要性を述べる際は、文を簡潔にし、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げましょう。

例: When I want to remember important things, I always repeat them several times because I found that repetition is the best way to memorise during my high school years.

× Yes, I'm scared at memorizing things when I was a high school student.

✓ Yes, I was scared of memorizing things when I was a high school student.

The phrase 'scared at memorizing' is incorrect. The correct preposition with 'scared' is 'of', and 'memorizing' is the gerund form used correctly here. Also, the tense should be past ('was scared') to match 'when I was a high school student'.

× Because I was preparing for the entrance exam English to Tabaxi University and I also tried many ways and then I find I found the best way for me.

✓ Because I was preparing for the English entrance exam to Tabaxi University, I also tried many ways and then I found the best way for me.

The phrase 'entrance exam English to Tabaxi University' is awkward; it should be 'English entrance exam to Tabaxi University'. Also, 'I find I found' is redundant; 'I found' is correct past tense. Commas help clarify the sentence structure.

× When I was a high school student I who got to write my name in English test.

✓ When I was a high school student, I forgot to write my name in the English test.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'I who got to write' is incorrect; likely the intended meaning is 'I forgot to write'. Adding 'the' before 'English test' is necessary, and a comma after the introductory clause improves readability.

× And then my English score is 0.

✓ And then my English score was 0.

The tense should be past ('was') to match the past context. 'Score' is singular and used correctly here.

× I always try to say it a Latin Mass and good so summer.

✓ I always try to say it at Latin Mass and during the summer.

The prepositions 'a' and 'good so' are incorrect here. The correct prepositions are 'at' for events like Mass and 'during' for periods like summer. 'Good so' seems to be a mistranslation or error.

× Because I can't eat food thanks to many people increasing foreign people.

✓ Because I can't eat food without the help of many people, including foreigners.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Thanks to many people increasing foreign people' is unclear. The corrected sentence clarifies the intended meaning that the speaker relies on help from many people, including foreigners.

× So I have to appreciate them.

✓ So I have to appreciate them.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× When I want to memorize important things.

✓ When I want to memorize important things,

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause. It should be connected to the following sentence or completed to form a full sentence.

× I always say it repeatedly.

✓ I always say it repeatedly.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I understood a saying repeatedly is the best way for me to memorizing important things when I was a high school student.

✓ I understood that saying things repeatedly was the best way for me to memorize important things when I was a high school student.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'I understood a saying repeatedly' is incorrect; it should be 'I understood that saying things repeatedly'. Also, 'to memorizing' should be 'to memorize' (infinitive form). The tense is adjusted to past to match 'when I was a high school student'.