Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够自然，表达不清晰且有语法错误，内容重复且冗长。建议简化句子结构，避免无意义的词汇，明确表达观点。

例: Yes, I have a good memory, especially for things I care about, like friends' birthdays and important facts related to my major. However, I find it harder to remember complex information like chemistry equations unless I study them regularly.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达混乱，内容不连贯。建议使用完整句子，清晰描述事件并表达感受，避免拼写错误。

例: Yes, I once forgot my best friend's birthday. I felt really bad because I had written it down in my notebook but was too busy with exams to remember. I apologized to her as soon as I realized my mistake.

提案: 回答内容较为具体，但句子结构不完整且有语法错误。建议使用完整句子，逻辑清晰，表达准确。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember school deadlines, class schedules, and work tasks like preparing presentations. I also always bring my student ID to access the library and teaching buildings. To help me remember, I set reminders on my phone.

提案: 回答较为自然且内容具体，但部分表达略显口语化且有小错误。建议注意语法准确性，适当使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: If I have something important like an exam or job interview, I usually set alarms on my phone to remind me. I also write it down in my notes app to double-check the time. Additionally, I sometimes stick a post-it note on my laptop screen to make sure I don't forget.

× Well I did see I've got a pretty decent memory, especially when it comes to stuff I care about like some lawyers and people's birthdays or things about my major.

✓ Well, I do see I've got a pretty decent memory, especially when it comes to stuff I care about like some dates and people's birthdays or things about my major.

这里的时态应该用一般现在时，因为学生在描述自己现在的记忆能力。原句中使用了过去时'did see'，不符合语境。建议改为'do see'。

× But if you ask me memorize a bunch of how to record date or chemistry equations hosted in my brown just a test to fridge.

✓ But if you ask me to memorize a bunch of how to record dates or chemistry equations stored in my brain just as a test to fridge.

原句中缺少不定式to，'ask me memorize'应为'ask me to memorize'。另外，'hosted in my brown'应为'stored in my brain'，'brown'是拼写错误。

× So yeah is it depends on the.

✓ So yeah, it depends on that.

原句结构不完整，缺少主语和谓语的正确搭配。应改为完整句子'So yeah, it depends on that.'。

× Oh yeah totally I was for God my best friend birthday and feels so bad I was literally kicking myself for days even though I do writing her birthday in my notebook but I ended up forgetting it just because I was too busy with exams and start off to apologize.

✓ Oh yeah totally I forgot my best friend's birthday and felt so bad I was literally kicking myself for days even though I did write her birthday in my notebook but I ended up forgetting it just because I was too busy with exams and started off to apologize.

原句中'was for God'应为'forgot'，动词时态错误。'feels'应为过去式'felt'。'do writing'应为过去式'did write'。'start off to apologize'应为'started to apologize'。整体需要统一过去时态。

× I shoot it hurt too and I small.

✓ I thought it hurt too and I felt small.

原句中'shoot'应为'thought'，'small'用法错误，应为'felt small'表示感到渺小。这里是代词和动词的错误使用。

× Meaning school staff deadlines, class schedules and work to prepare for presentations.

✓ I mean school stuff like deadlines, class schedules and work to prepare for presentations.

原句中'Meaning'用法错误，应为'I mean'。'staff'应为'stuff'，表示事情。

× And of course remembering to bring my student ID is amassed.

✓ And of course remembering to bring my student ID is a must.

原句中'amassed'用词错误，应为'a must'表示必须。

× Otherwise I wanted be able to access the library and something teaching buildings.

✓ Otherwise I wouldn't be able to access the library and some teaching buildings.

原句中'wanted'应为'wouldn't'，'something'应为'some'，代词使用错误。

× I keep all the reminders on my phone just to make sure that I won't forget important things.

✓ I keep all the reminders on my phone just to make sure that I won't forget important things.

该句语法正确，无需修改。

× Yeah, if something really important like an exam or job interview, I will usually set alarms on my phone to make sure I don't miss it.

✓ Yeah, if something is really important like an exam or job interview, I will usually set alarms on my phone to make sure I don't miss it.

原句缺少系动词'is'，导致句子不完整。

× Sometimes I'll draw it down in my notes apps as well just so I can double check it end time.

✓ Sometimes I'll write it down in my notes app as well just so I can double check the time.

'draw it down'应为'write it down'，'notes apps'应为'notes app'，'double check it end time'应为'double check the time'，介词和词汇使用错误。

× And if I really want to make sure I don't forget, I'll go old school and stick a post it on my laptop screen.

✓ And if I really want to make sure I don't forget, I'll go old school and stick a post-it on my laptop screen.

'post it'应为'post-it'，表示便利贴，词汇拼写错误。