Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和冗余，使用更自然流畅的表达方式。例如，可以先直接回答问题，然后用具体例子支持观点。

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things. For example, I can remember events from when I was very young, like what I was doing at three years old. Also, I perform well in history because I can recall many historical facts easily.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但句子结构不够清晰，时态和语法错误较多。建议使用简单明了的句子，注意时态一致，并使用连接词使叙述更连贯。

例: Yes, I once forgot to bring a team assignment from home. Since I was responsible for the papers, my teammates asked me where it was. Then I remembered I left it at home, so I quickly went back to get it.

提案: 回答中表达不够准确，存在语法和用词错误。建议先明确主题句，然后用具体细节支持，注意句子简洁和逻辑连贯。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to go to school every day and complete my homework and assignments. Besides, I also help with housework because I have responsibilities at home with my parents.

提案: 回答内容较好，但表达有些重复且语法不够准确。建议减少重复，使用更准确的词汇和句式，使表达更自然流畅。

例: I usually set reminders on my phone to remember important things. There are many apps that notify me before the task is due, like 10 minutes or a day in advance, which helps me stay organized.

× I have sometimes recall so every long times ago memories like what I'm doing when I was three years old.

✓ I can sometimes recall very long-ago memories like what I was doing when I was three years old.

这里“times”应为单数形式“time”，因为指的是“很久以前的记忆”，不是多个“时间”。另外，句子结构不清晰，调整为更自然的表达。

× So and some people says you are really good at memorizing some historical stuff.

✓ And some people say I am really good at memorizing some historical stuff.

“some people”是复数，谓语动词应为“say”而非“says”。另外，代词“you”应改为“I”，因为说话者在谈论自己。

× So I'm performing good on histories.

✓ So I'm performing well in history.

“histories”应为不可数名词“history”，表示学科。

× So that's also approve of good memory.

✓ So that's also proof of a good memory.

“approve”是动词，句中应使用名词“proof”表示“证明”。另外，缺少冠词“a”。

× Yes, once I've forgotten to bring a team assignments from my home because I'm a carrier of our paper works.

✓ Yes, once I forgot to bring a team assignment from my home because I was the carrier of our paperwork.

“I've forgotten”应使用一般过去时“forgot”，因为描述过去发生的具体事件。名词“assignments”应为单数“assignment”，且“paper works”应为不可数名词“paperwork”。

× But I left it at home because I forgot to bring it.

✓ But I left it at home because I forgot to bring it.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× So my teammates asked me where is it and then I remember all I forgot it at home but I rushed to my home and bring it back.

✓ So my teammates asked me where it was, and then I remembered that I forgot it at home, but I rushed home and brought it back.

间接疑问句中语序应为陈述语序“where it was”。“remember”应为过去时“remembered”。“bring”应为过去式“brought”。

× So the most important thing to remember is I need to go to school everyday because I must students and I need to do my homeworks, need to do the assignments the teacher sign for us and also need to do some house working because I'm responsible for my own family.

✓ So the most important thing to remember is that I need to go to school every day because I am a student, and I need to do my homework, need to do the assignments the teacher assigns to us, and also need to do some housework because I'm responsible for my own family.

“must students”不合语法，应改为“I am a student”。“homeworks”应为不可数名词“homework”。“sign”应为第三人称单数“assigns”。“house working”应为不可数名词“housework”。

× So I also take care of the houses and the path in my homes with my parents.

✓ So I also take care of the house and the path in my home with my parents.

“houses”和“homes”应为单数形式“house”和“home”，因为指的是自己的家。

× So I will usually send some reminder on my phone.

✓ So I usually set some reminders on my phone.

“send reminder on phone”表达不自然，通常说“set reminders”。

× So there actually are many apps that can remind you that important times important tags we need to do.

✓ There are actually many apps that can remind you of important times and important tasks we need to do.

“remind you that”应为“remind you of”。“tags”应为“tasks”，更符合语境。

× So I basically just set a reminder and the apps will remind you like 10 minutes before or one days before depending on your house sets your tasks.

✓ So I basically just set a reminder and the apps will remind me 10 minutes before or one day before depending on how you set your tasks.

“remind you”应改为“remind me”，因为说话者在讲述自己的行为。“one days”应为“one day”。“house sets your tasks”语义不清，改为“how you set your tasks”。

× So it's helped me memorizing this important.

✓ So it helps me memorize these important things.

“helped”应为一般现在时“helps”，因为描述习惯动作。“memorizing”应为动词原形“memorize”。“this important”应为“these important things”。