Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to avoid repeating words like 'I' and use correct plural forms (e.g., 'dates', 'information'). Also, organize your sentences better and use linking words to improve coherence. For example, you can say, "I have a strong memory because I remember important dates such as birthdays and anniversaries of my friends and family, which helps me stay connected and organized."

例: I have a strong memory because I remember important dates such as birthdays and anniversaries of my friends and family, which helps me stay connected and organized.

提案: Your answer is relevant and detailed but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use past tense consistently and avoid unnecessary words. Also, use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas smoothly. For example, "During my bachelor's degree, I forgot to prepare for a medicinal chemistry test because I woke up late. As a result, I was stressed and did not perform well."

例: During my bachelor's degree, I forgot to prepare for a medicinal chemistry test because I woke up late. As a result, I was stressed and did not perform well.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is incomplete and has unclear sentences. Avoid sentence fragments and ensure your ideas are fully expressed. Use linking words like 'also' or 'in addition' to connect points. For example, "In daily life, I think it is important to pray regularly because it helps us stay calm and focused. Also, we should always be grateful for what we have, expressing gratitude for the beauty of life."

例: In daily life, I think it is important to pray regularly because it helps us stay calm and focused. Also, we should always be grateful for what we have, expressing gratitude for the beauty of life.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to express your ideas clearly and use complete sentences. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'also' properly. For instance, "I remember important things by connecting them to my personal life. For example, I link important dates with family members' birthdays. This method helps me recall important information."

例: I remember important things by connecting them to my personal life. For example, I link important dates with family members' birthdays. This method helps me recall important information.

× I remembers important date informations, an birthday and anniversary's of friends and family members which makes them quite happy and it helps me to stay connected with the people an organized my things.

✓ I remember important dates, information, and birthdays and anniversaries of friends and family members which make them quite happy and help me to stay connected with the people and organize my things.

The verb 'remembers' should be 'remember' to agree with the singular subject 'I'. 'Date informations' is incorrect; 'information' is uncountable and 'dates' should be plural. 'Birthday and anniversary's' should be 'birthdays and anniversaries' without apostrophes. 'Makes' should be 'make' to agree with the plural subject. 'Helps' should be 'help' to agree with the plural subject. 'An' should be 'and'. 'Organized' should be 'organize' to match the parallel structure.

× Our teacher has announced and the test in advance and advisors to study carefully.

✓ Our teacher announced the test in advance and advised us to study carefully.

The present perfect 'has announced' is incorrect here; simple past 'announced' fits better. 'Advisors' is a noun; the correct verb is 'advised'. 'Advised to study' needs an object 'us' to be correct.

× As a result, I was stressful and didn't perform well on the exam.

✓ As a result, I was stressed and didn't perform well on the exam.

'Stressful' is an adjective describing something that causes stress; the correct past participle adjective to describe a person is 'stressed'.

× In our daily life, I think everyone should remember to pray regularly because it helps us to stay calm and focused.

✓ In our daily life, I think everyone should remember to pray regularly because it helps them to stay calm and focused.

'Everyone' is singular but refers to multiple people; pronouns referring to 'everyone' should be singular or neutral. Using 'us' is incorrect here; 'them' is better to maintain agreement.

× Apart from that, people should. I should always be grateful for what they have an own.

✓ Apart from that, people should always be grateful for what they have and own.

The sentence is fragmented and incomplete. 'People should.' is incomplete. 'An own' is incorrect; it should be 'and own'.

× This should express the affirmations of gratitude on, such as thanking the universe for making life beautiful.

✓ This should express affirmations of gratitude, such as thanking the universe for making life beautiful.

'Affirmations of gratitude on' is incorrect; the preposition 'on' is unnecessary here.

× I remember important things by connecting it to the things in my life.

✓ I remember important things by connecting them to things in my life.

'It' is singular but refers to 'important things' which is plural; 'them' is correct. Also, 'the things' is better as 'things' for general reference.

× For example on some important date to connect with some of the family members were they are something connect anything.

✓ For example, on some important dates, I connect with some family members; they are connected in some way.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs restructuring for clarity and grammatical correctness.