Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa serta pengucapan yang membingungkan. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih terstruktur dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan jelas, serta hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, I enjoy remembering numbers and important dates, and I rarely forget things my friends tell me.

提案: Jawaban Anda tidak koheren dan sulit dipahami karena struktur kalimat yang tidak tepat. Gunakan kalimat yang jelas dan langsung menjawab pertanyaan dengan contoh spesifik.

例: Yes, sometimes I forget important things, like what I need to do at university. However, I always make sure to bring my homework to class so I don't get into trouble with my lecturer.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang fokus dan tidak langsung menjawab pertanyaan. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih spesifik dan relevan dengan kehidupan sehari-hari Anda.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember important tasks like appointments and deadlines. Also, I try to remember to be kind and respectful to others.

提案: Jawaban Anda mengandung banyak kesalahan tata bahasa dan kurang terstruktur. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan teratur, serta jelaskan metode yang Anda gunakan secara spesifik.

例: I usually make a list on my phone or write notes on paper to help me remember important things I need to do each day.

× Yes, I'm pretty good at my brother memorizing things.

✓ Yes, I'm pretty good at memorizing things.

The phrase 'my brother memorizing things' is incorrect here. The correct form is 'good at memorizing things' because 'good at' is followed by a gerund (verb + -ing). The phrase 'my brother' is unnecessary and causes confusion.

× I always like to memorizing number an dates and also never off my friends.

✓ I always like memorizing numbers and dates and also never forget my friends.

The verb 'like' should be followed by either the infinitive 'to memorize' or the gerund 'memorizing', but not 'to memorizing'. Also, 'number an dates' should be 'numbers and dates'. 'Never off my friends' is incorrect; likely intended 'never forget my friends'.

× Uhm yes, I like to memorizing everything.

✓ Uhm yes, I like memorizing everything.

After 'like', use either 'to memorize' or 'memorizing'. 'Like to memorizing' is incorrect because 'to' should be followed by the base verb, not the gerund.

× Home I often forgotten something important like.

✓ Sometimes I often forget something important.

'Home' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'Sometimes'. 'I often forgotten' is incorrect; 'forgotten' is past participle and needs auxiliary verb 'have'. The correct simple present is 'I often forget'.

× What I do in university?

✓ What do I do at university?

In questions, auxiliary verb 'do' is needed before the subject 'I'. Also, 'in university' is better expressed as 'at university'.

× I have never forgotten my homework to bring it to the class, so I got.

✓ I have never forgotten to bring my homework to class, so I got.

The phrase 'forgotten my homework to bring it' is awkward. The correct form is 'forgotten to bring my homework'. 'To the class' can be simplified to 'to class'.

× Matt from my lecture.

✓ a bad mark from my lecturer.

'Matt from my lecture' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or typo. The intended meaning is probably 'a bad mark from my lecturer'.

× I think we need to remember that.

✓ I think we need to remember this.

The word 'that' is vague here; 'this' is more appropriate to refer to the idea just mentioned.

× How we bring ourselves to each other and how we treat people to the best version of our life.

✓ How we relate to each other and how we treat people to be the best version of ourselves.

'Bring ourselves to each other' is incorrect; 'relate to each other' is better. 'Treat people to the best version of our life' is awkward; it should be 'treat people to be the best version of ourselves'.

× I think if we can do the same, we can go.

✓ I think if we can do the same, we can succeed.

The phrase 'we can go' is incomplete and unclear. 'We can succeed' fits better in context.

× I usually. Listing in my phone what remember what important things I still remember in this day.

✓ I usually list on my phone the important things I need to remember each day.

'Listing' should be 'list' as the main verb. The sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× I also make a list and also make note or on my phone or so in the paper so I can fully remember why should I do in this.

✓ I also make a list and notes on my phone or on paper so I can fully remember what I should do.

The sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Make note or on my phone or so in the paper' is incorrect; it should be 'make notes on my phone or on paper'. 'Why should I do in this' is incorrect; it should be 'what I should do'.