Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中语法和表达不够自然，且句子结构混乱。建议使用更简洁明了的句子，避免重复和语法错误。可以先直接回答问题，然后补充细节。

例: I'm not very good at memorising things. However, I sometimes practice meditation to improve my concentration, which helps me remember better.

提案: 回答内容不连贯，表达不清晰，且有语法错误。建议先明确事件，再用连贯的句子描述细节，避免重复和无意义的词语。

例: Yes, about six months ago, I forgot my ID card at home when I went to the railway station. I had to go back home to get it, which was quite inconvenient.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然的问题。建议先用一句话直接回答问题，然后用连接词补充具体细节，使表达更流畅。

例: I need to remember the time my daughter goes out so I can pick her up on time. Also, I always remember to bring my shopping list when I go to the supermarket to buy dried goods.

提案: 回答中有多处语法和表达错误，句子不完整。建议使用简单清晰的句子，先说明方法，再补充细节，使用连接词使表达连贯。

例: One way I remember important things is by writing them on a small piece of paper and carrying it in my pocket. Additionally, I prioritize tasks to focus on the most important ones.

× And I'm not very good at memory things and however sometimes I practice meditation to improve my concentration which can help me remember things better.

✓ I'm not very good at memorising things; however, sometimes I practice meditation to improve my concentration, which can help me remember things better.

这里'memory things'用法不正确，应该用动名词'memorising things'表示记忆的动作。'and however'连接词用法不当，应改为'; however,'表示转折。建议使用正确的动名词和连接词。

× Oh yes, about six months ago, I've got my ID card and at home, when I went to railway station, I had to go home.

✓ Oh yes, about six months ago, I forgot my ID card at home. When I went to the railway station, I had to go back home to get it.

'I've got'时态不符合上下文，应使用过去时'forgot'。句子结构混乱，需拆分并补充缺失信息。

× I have to go back to home to get it, which was quite unconvenient.

✓ I had to go back home to get it, which was quite inconvenient.

'go back to home'中'home'前不需要介词'to'，应直接用'go back home'。单词'unconvenient'拼写错误，应为'inconvenient'。

× I almost. Amazed them real. Real.

✓ I almost amazed them, really.

句子结构不完整，断句错误。应合并为完整句子，表达清晰。

× Need to remember I basically I need to remember that time my daughters go out.

✓ I basically need to remember the time my daughters go out.

句子缺少主语，结构混乱。应补充主语并调整语序。

× So I can pick her up on time.

✓ So I can pick them up on time.

'daughters'为复数，代词应使用'them'而非'she'。

× Additionally, I need to remember the shopping list when I go to the supermarket to buy the dried items.

✓ Additionally, I need to remember the shopping list when I go to the supermarket to buy dried items.

'the dried items'中'dried items'为泛指，前面不需要定冠词'the'。

× One of the way I remember important things all is our preferred to write them on a small piece of paper and the carriage carriage my pockets so I can check it anytime, anywhere.

✓ One of the ways I remember important things is I prefer to write them on a small piece of paper and carry it in my pockets so I can check it anytime, anywhere.

'One of the way'应为'One of the ways'，'our preferred'应为'I prefer'，'carriage carriage'拼写错误，应为'carry it'。句子结构需调整。

× An additional EI like prioritized task. To remember what is most important.

✓ Additionally, I like to prioritize tasks to remember what is most important.

句子不完整，'An additional EI like prioritized task'无意义。应改为完整句子，使用正确介词和动词形式。