Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Avoid unnecessary words like 'Eric' which seem out of context. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific examples, and keep it concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I pay close attention to details. For example, I can easily remember important dates, which helps me perform well in my exams. This ability allows me to recall information quickly when needed.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains filler words like 'ummm' and 'uh' which affect fluency. Try to avoid these and express your ideas clearly. Also, correct grammatical mistakes and use linking words to connect your points logically. Keep your answer focused and concise.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, I sometimes miss appointments when I get distracted. This usually happens when I am stressed because I forget to check my schedule properly.

提案: Your answer is somewhat fragmented and incomplete. Avoid filler words and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent. Use linking words like 'besides' appropriately and provide specific details to enrich your answer. Keep your response within 5 sentences.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to drink enough water to stay hydrated and healthy. Besides that, I keep track of my appointments and meetings for the day. I also remind myself about important tasks to complete on time.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and grammatically correct. Avoid unnecessary pauses and ensure your sentences are complete. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about your methods.

例: I remember important things by making charts and tables for specific activities. Sometimes, I also create a to-do list for the whole day to plan my tasks effectively.

× I'm an attended person who pays more attention to details.

✓ I'm an attentive person who pays more attention to details.

The word 'attended' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'attentive' to describe someone who pays attention. 'Attended' is a past participle of 'attend' and does not fit the intended meaning.

× which also helps me to perform board in my exams.

✓ which also helps me to perform well in my exams.

The phrase 'perform board' is incorrect. The correct preposition and word choice is 'perform well' to indicate doing well in exams.

× I have forgotten ummmm anything important things in the past.

✓ I have forgotten some important things in the past.

The phrase 'anything important things' is incorrect because 'anything' and 'things' are redundant together. Using 'some important things' is grammatically correct.

× Whenever I'm in stress or I'm boarding it because I forget to check my schedule properly.

✓ Whenever I'm stressed or I'm bored because I forget to check my schedule properly.

The phrase 'in stress' should be 'stressed' to describe the state. 'Boarding it' is incorrect; the correct word is 'bored' to express feeling uninterested or distracted.

× Besides that, I always make sure to keep a. Track of any appointments or meetings I have on that day of.

✓ Besides that, I always make sure to keep track of any appointments or meetings I have on that day.

The sentence has an unnecessary period after 'a' and an extra 'of' at the end. Removing these corrects the sentence structure.

× Sometimes I also I remind myself about important tasks that.

✓ Sometimes I also remind myself about important tasks.

The sentence is incomplete and has an extra 'I'. Removing the extra 'I' and the incomplete ending makes the sentence correct.

× I remember important things by making a proper. Chart and table for a particular activities and sometimes I make A to do list for the whole day and plan things.

✓ I remember important things by making a proper chart and table for particular activities, and sometimes I make a to-do list for the whole day and plan things.

The sentence has incorrect capitalization and article usage: 'Chart' and 'A' should be lowercase; 'a particular activities' should be 'particular activities' without 'a' because 'activities' is plural; 'to do list' should be 'to-do list' with hyphens; adding a comma improves clarity.